Peer edit anyone?

[westwrestler16]

Hey any of you cool cats want to peer edit my admissions essay, especially if you are smart. It would be sooooo much appreciated thanks

Comments

[pinkwish66]

I still want to know exactly what and/or how long a collge essay should be. What do you write about? I like what you have here. But can an essay be full of analogies or must it have an experience in life that has changed you and made you a better person?

[jilliroll]

Depending on the question here and assuming you answered it I love the idea for your essay. It is original and fits the type of school/major your applying too/for. One mistake I found..

"it has countless other attributes reflect precisely what I am looking for."

Should it be its??? Just wanted to make sure you caught that and fix it:)

Good luck! Hope you get in!

thanks

[jilliroll]

thank you yea I am going through again and doing all gramatical and punctual mistakes this was just a first draft. but yea I think I actually am going to insert a which in between attributes and reflect

[_kissitgoodbye_]

principal (the way you spelled it) refers to a principal of a school. you want principle. and the last paragraph.... you dont really need to tell them about their school, they know all that already, try not listing everything they offer like that its not really showing your writing abilities. other than that, excellent.

[tenth_sheep]

I have other suggestions that I think would make things flow better if you'd like them, but I'll only put the grammar, spelling and punctiation corrections here

u r awsome

[westwrestler16]

thanks steve can I say you are amazinglyawsome!!!