the first chapter again but with revisoins and help from Batty

[wheelz_s]

Setting:old world japan......time of the samurai......on a small unnamed island is where the story takes place.....

Upon the brink of the high cliff, he stood still as stone: nearly invisible in the darkness. The night’s wind whipped him as he searched the ground below. With a sudden impulse, he leapt from the cliffs edge, down towards the trees.

Comments

wow

[radioactivepain]

Dude... Did you right that... awsome

Re: wow

[wheelz_s]

...yea i wrote it....but i had help with revising from a friend.....and that is big part of why it sounds so good