[fic] Arcanum Paterfamilias -- Chapter Three: Olschka Zimyair

[whips_n_dozers]

Arcanum Paterfamilias -- Chapter Three: Olschka Zimyair
Authors: mfelizandy & fractured_chaos
Genre: Drama/Political Thriller. Futurefic, Genfic, Plotfic, Light Romance. No Sex.
Rating: Teen, for violence and Ed's potty mouth.
Chapter Word Count: 10,000
Main Canon Characters/Pairings: Scar/OC. With nods to: Roy/Riza, Ed/Winry and Al/Mei. Hints of: Jean/Rebecca and Ling/

Comments

[dzioo]

just so you know, I'm following all the chapters you post, and I adore the changes that you make^^ I don't remember that conversation between Naomi and Tiras about adulthood and consequences from previous revisions, but it's a really excellent touch, showing just how much trust and understanding is between Tiras and his surrogate pupil^^ the more interactions between them you show, the more I want Naomi to actually become his pupil. we'll see what plans she has for herself^^

heeee, loved the last paragraph with Misha and Abisha XDDD good thing that at least someone knows what to expect from the blonde traveler XDD great work you two! I'm really looking forward to further chapters!

[whips_n_dozers]

Thank you so much, dear! We have ch 4 up now, but there might be a bit of a delay for ch 5. I'll double-check to make sure you're authorized to see it. We've made quite a few changes (although the scene you illustrated with Ed will still be there), and we're still trying to pound out the dents in the story Vasupati tells Theo.

Funny thing, Ch 6 is almost finished, and Ch 7 is close. Its Ch 5 that's giving us fits. XD

[mfelizandy]

Uhhh...I'm changing the sparkplugs on the bulldozer?

[mfelizandy]

We've been tweaking a lot here and there. I'm glad you like them!

Tiras really is a mentor to Naomi, and he's going to have at least a couple more important scenes, when Naomi really needs him.

Abisha started out as a bit player, but he's become more and more of a person as we've worked with him. As for the blond traveler--Misha is all too familiar with his trouble-magnet qualities.

As a side note--I'm still lovin' on the sketch of Asher. I didn't have too clear an image of his face in my head, but you captured him perfectly. Plus I just love his hair.

[seta_suzume]

I didn't realize how interesting it would be to read about Elder Shan until it happened, ha ha.

"And then what happened?" is my main feeling right now.

the Tea Duel

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loved it so much; I can see it in my head and wish I could animate it.

Re: the Tea Duel

[whips_n_dozers]

Oh, thank you! We had so much fun describing it. The constant competitiveness between Scar/Misha and Makhu has a back-story, which we'll eventually get to.

Ishvarlan horses

[ext_674799]

Forgot to mention this. The bit about the coat golden coat color makes me think of Akhel-Tekes. They are known for having "metallic" coats, and are thought to have influenced the Throughbred.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Akhal-Teke

Re: Ishvarlan horses

[whips_n_dozers]

That's exactly what we based the Ishvarun horses on, as a matter of fact. ;) Check out the link in the story header. :D