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The Bishop Bunch 4/?

Feb 14, 2010 14:31

Title: The Bishop Bunch 4/?
Author: whisper_queen
Rating: NC-17
Summary: With Virginia Gray and Bob Bishop dating there are plenty of things that can go wrong. Especially between their two teenage children who are alike and yet so different all at once.
Notes/Warning: Unbeta'd. AU will have powers and Company action to come. Each chapter will contain a ( Read more... )

fic, grays, rating: nc-17, bishops, pairing: gabriel/elle

Comments 6

ellavee February 14 2010, 23:34:25 UTC

LOVED THIS CHAPTER!
And yes it totally cheered me up!
"“Can you . . . um . . . show me your dick?”" lol - loved that, could totally see adolescent elle saying that.
loved how wrong it was but how much neither seemed to care.
and elle is definitely wrong, that will totally happen again i bet.
cant wait for the next chapter to find out what Gabe thinks now.
update soon!!!

whisper_queen February 15 2010, 01:48:16 UTC

Teen Elle is so blunt and Teen Gabriel is very . . . willing.

Them as teenagers is so fun to write XD

Glad I got to cheer you up :)

d_wndy February 15 2010, 00:48:26 UTC

holy..
this going on a Disney is just .. i like the contrast of the innocence and then what happened between them.. wrong or right, it works!

whisper_queen February 15 2010, 01:49:49 UTC

I debated on the Disney thing, but it does work. Shows how much of a kid Elle really is . . . and how much she really isn't. Also how willing Gabriel is and how much he really cares about her.

Thanks for the comment!

di_elle February 15 2010, 22:17:51 UTC

Wow this chapter was totally unexpected! It really shows all Elle's faces, the little girl and then the not-so-innocent teen. I must say I've found Elle's a little too much experienced at first, but when you mentioned the sparks I totally remember this is not a powerless AU, so this is the Elle who love to play around with inmates, later (at least in my mind). So, kudos for this great chapter!

Now I am really curious to see how Gabriel would handle this, because I bet Elle would love to explore the new world she just discovered...

whisper_queen February 15 2010, 23:32:48 UTC

It does seem like a powerless AU because they are so young and Elle has to keep in her ability. Those playful visits with the inmates may come up later.

Thanks for commenting!