[FIC] more beauty than the moon??

[whitehime]

Author     : whitehime
Pairing    :  RYoda
Genre       :  fluff Rating: safe..
Summarry : ryo thinking something..n look at da moon.ueda feel ignore n ask too himself.. i                      don't know how to write summarry..gomen

its my first fic..i know im failed..comment please..

Comments

its sweet

[riufa]

its good..sweet i think..

thanks 4 writing

Re: its sweet

[whitehime]

thx..
4 read my story..

im happy u like it..

[shuyen]

hi

sweet story

^_^

[whitehime]

thanks 4 reading..

im sure its really hard 2 understand my story..

[shuyen]

you're right, but u know it is understandable since you're just beginning to write a fic...the story has a good point and if you want it to be perfect (i mean from the surface up to its deepest element)i guess you can call for a beta-reader's help found in this community..hehehhehe..anyways i still love ur fic since i love people writing fics about RYODA..hehehe

continue writing and ganbatte!!!

chuu*

[shuyen]

and another thing, i really wanna post in this community but i don't know how..lol..so i just keep my fics in my mind.. so i admired u after telling that it was ur first time posting (gosh...you really posted ur fic well) in which i really don't know how to do until now..heheheh

so agen ganbatte!!!

[miruiki]

:) you know, this was really, really nice.

from a writer's perspective, i can give you good and bad points :) and definitely, the bad points can be corrected :)

you have such a beautiful way of thinking, how love can go through our dearest pairing :)
I'm sure you have more ideas brewing up, and you will write them down :)

and you did mention your english is bad. well, in ryoda_love, there are beta requests :) you can ask them to proof read your stories :) so the english would be more or less better ^^ and from this, you could also learn how to speak and write english better, don't you think?

this was really swell, i love it really :)

and congratualtions on your first Fanfic! ^^

[whitehime]

thx..
4 reading my story..n 4 da coment

im new in lj so i little confused, maybe totally confused how to use this..

its really nice if my english can improve
thx a lot

[miruiki]

you'll get the hang of it! ^^

[dayenniez]

This is so lovely..

you can find a beta if you're not confident with your English. XD
but for the 1st timer, this is good~

Thanks for sharing!

[whitehime]

thx 4 reading

yes im bad in english.since im in highschool until im in college now

i'll find a beta when i write another fic

one more time thx
haha

[floppy_snoopi]

this fic is nice ^_^

thank you for sharing

you can beta request in ryoda-love comm ^_^

[whitehime]

ur elcome

happy u like it

thx 4 read