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wyntreaurora October 12 2010, 07:09:00 UTC
Fascinating is really the word I like best for this right now :) I was totally intrigued earlier today by the premise in the Bones POV story and then when you started weaving all these other pieces and characters in from all these other places in the TOS (and I'm assuming TNG?) verse, it just kept getting more and more interesting. Really great look at a possible Kirk scenario, and fabulous job with the reality of the gritty stuff - there were places it was really hard to keep reading because it hurt, but I think you did the subject justice.

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whiteraven1606 October 12 2010, 22:38:29 UTC
Thanks. I'm glad you like it. I liked the prompt that started it from the ST XI Kink Meme and I added more than what was originally on the meme. Then I decided to do Jim's POV on the whole thing. :) I have TOS, ENG, and sort of TNG bits in there. Some from books instead of the shows (like Zar). I like putting in little things to show they are all one 'verse. I did the same thing with the AU Bigbang only there I got something from every series except DS9.

I rather worried about the gritty stuff. I didn't want it to be all doom and gloom, but Kirk was on the streets and I didn't want to downplay how nasty that can be either. The hardest thing was reining in Ruth because she wanted to hunt down Frank and beat him over the head with her handbag. ;)

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nancylea57 October 12 2010, 07:46:12 UTC
nothing against traditional families but this is the perfect way to build your own!!!!! add one let that one add one and on and on and on soon the whole universe could be related and then we would only have sibling rivalry not open warfare. ros comment about saving the world seemed so appropriate and now they have expanded it again.

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whiteraven1606 October 12 2010, 22:41:17 UTC
:) The kids just kept showing up. I'm happy you like it.

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whiteraven1606 October 16 2010, 23:54:28 UTC
Thank you very much. I enjoy making the story's world as deep as I can and interconnecting it where possible into cannon. :) I almost stopped adding children before the boys, but then I decided I might as well add them. I'm glad I could make you laugh. Thank you for reading and commenting.

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alluranna October 13 2010, 22:19:20 UTC
Okay, I could say that I loved this, but that would be selling how I feel short. Absolutely AMAZING! I felt so bad for my sweet Jim, but Bones taking care of him just made me sigh happily. They way their family grew to include each other and their children... well, let's just say my heart has that happy full feeling right now!

And I cannot say how so very much I love the kids protective streak for their fathers. The entire story was just out of this world!!!

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whiteraven1606 October 17 2010, 00:02:12 UTC
:D Thank you! I like dragging characters through hell and then handing them a happy ending. I'm glad you stuck through the hard parts.

:) Thanks. I drove school bus for several years and I found kids to be very protective of their family members, so that's where the idea for that came from. :) I totally want to just hug this comment. Thank you so much for reading and commenting.

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shadowclub October 20 2010, 00:00:03 UTC
So, I wanted to leave a more detailed review for this story before I modified my post with the music for this!

I really loved how gritty the beginning was and the way you showed how Jim essentially lived in an environment so unsafe and fear-filled yet prefers it because he is able to control it, you really captured the evolution of Jim. Ultimately his ability to use all these skills for bettering the world is his best characteristic I think. Also, even though Bones was hitting on young!Jim, it was still pretty hot and Spock in the mix only made it better!

Also, I think all the children in this fic deserve their own stories! Loved all of the details and when Winona came to visit it broke my heart to see them all stand up for Jim.



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