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whitewizard

Story

Nov 06, 2005 19:37

No title, but I do have SOME idea where I'm going.

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Kartje's review anonymous November 7 2005, 01:02:40 UTC

That's pretty damn good. Good start. It's different to see you write through the eyes of a girl...I guess it would be cool to write it from that perspective. I also like the cutting off the sentences at the end of some paragraphs but yeah its a good start maybe say more about her feelings...I just finished reading a teenage book and i didn't think it had enough feeling in it. That's why I like first person's...but good start

I like... freemanjinks November 7 2005, 04:39:05 UTC

I have recently discovered the benefits of writing in the first-person, and it has done wonders to clear up my writer's block (my inherent laziness-eh, not so much...). I'll have to share a part of my "strung-out, emo teenager" story with you in the future. I find it enhances the piece so much if you can try your best to use a recognizable line-of-thought process to writing in the first-person. In my case the narrator is batshit insane and goes on tangents with little regard for stream-of-concious. If that's sounding familiar to you, then you've probably read The Catcher in the Rye.

Yes. Salinger has taken over my life.

I promised, after all... freemanjinks November 7 2005, 23:32:56 UTC

I wrote this when I was supposed to be writing my allusion paper a few weeks ago. It should be expanded soon, but I guess it's fine by itself for the moment (it isn't really supposed to be the beginning of the story anyway, interestingly enough ( ... )

super_bunnyz_01 November 8 2005, 15:05:58 UTC

Hey, I really like the story. Keep it up, i wanna read one of your finished stories soon! I really was getting interested in Tracy, that was her name right?