CRITIQUE ME

[whitney_j]

THE QUESTION WAS: In the 17th century, New England Puritans tried to create a model society. What were their aspirations and to what extent were those aspirations fulfilled during the 17th century?

OKAY! i know this is one of my worst papers ever, so that is why i ask for the critique...but please don't tell me to start over cause...no.

Comments

oops

[whitney_j]

where the"however this was later -------" part is , fill in this...
However, this also changed with passing generations, as later people seem to work for only the benefit of themselves.

[listachica]

i think that what you have written is good. i liked your ending.

[anonymous]

What the hell whit? That's a really good paper. Mind if I steal it? lol j/k

Nicole

[luckypoprocks]

wow that was some crazy sh*t --i read like the first sentance and was like- whoa dang mine sucks...but i used the word damnation a lot which is fun

but yeah whit- sounds/looks/is awesome--QED biotch lmao

*only advice would be throw in 'damnation' more..it's a fun word and it's like you're swearing but you arent! haha jp it's sweet

[whitney_j]

WORDS I MUST USE MORE
*Damnation
*QED, biotch
*Easy Peezy Lemon Squeezy

thanks for complimenting the paper [everyone] but that doesnt help me make it better - when i get a D you can all laugh and be like 'woah you suck';)

[luckypoprocks]

H YEAH!!!!! we're like vocab-twins

i'll read it tomorrow, i swear

[eevil_kittyy]

Im going to bed in like 5 seconds so I dont have time to read it but let me just say that in my honors english class, we too are studying the puritans.
I think this makes us freaking soul mates or something.

Re: i'll read it tomorrow, i swear

[whitney_j]

lol, but of course.

and you may have already suffered reading it, but you dont have to now because i turned it in today.