need a quick beta read

[arnica]

 The story is actually Torchwood, Jack, far before and shortly after CoE, mostly revolving around himself and his daughter. I'm just looking for a quick spelling/grammar check to get it ready for submission to teaspoon and the piece is approximately 1300 words. If you'd like to take a look at it it's over at my writing journal. It's Unicorn Song,

Comments

[jenrose1]

Quick read gives only two errors:

"daughters feet" should be daughter's feet

"She moves s much like her mother." Omit the extra s

A bittersweet story...

[mary_pseud]

jenrose already spotted some that I had seen.

SP:
the black and white illistrations = illustrations
Jack is one hundred percent certian = certain
anything that looks like it maight = might

Grammar:
"You must never," He's whispering now. "run from anything immortal. It attracts their attention." = All one sentence; no capital H in He's, comma after now.
what is he is not an optimist with a galaxy wide streak of emotional masochism, = what is he is not is awkward. Rephrase?
feet enter his eyeline = eyeline? Not line of sight?