fic: friction (lie to me)

[wickedandcruel]

Title: Friction

Comments

[topaz_eyes]

I like this--you made it feel plausible and I love how you show Gillian's conflicted feelings about sleeping with Ben.

He had slept with the one person she had warned him about, the human roulette, with Poppy -- this is a perfect metaphor, especially in the context of this story.

One bit of concrit: your sex scene is too explicit for a PG-13 rating. It's at least an R.

[wickedandcruel]

Thanks =)

Thank you, I wasn't sure how to rate it since there wasn't anything really graphic and I rarely include the sex itself in my stories *lol*

[yazizzle33]

God I thought this was brilliant beyond words! &hearts So perfect! I mean, I'm not Gillian/Ben hardcore shipper, but I do love their friendship and I think if she were to turn to anyone during this time in Vegas, it would be Ben, especially with the way Fold Equity ended. Anyways, I loved this! The writing was perfect. I loved being inside Gillian's head and how you portrayed her conflicted feelings with sleeping with Ben. I actually really loved how you wrote the sex scene, and the ending bit with Cal waiting inside her room was even better. I too think it needs a second part, a conclusion so to speak, though I love the way you ended it here. Yep, can't say enough good times about this, hehe. Just really great!

[wickedandcruel]

Thank you =) I'm not a Ben/Gillian fan at all but after I saw some people saying how it made sense she slept with him this came to my mind and I had to write, specially b/c Gillian is too into Cal to sleep with anyone else out of anything other than just lust/sex.

[yazizzle33]

Hehe, well you made it great even though you're not a Ben/Gill fan. And I agree that she's wayy too into Cal to sleep with anyone else.

[wickedandcruel]

It easier to write for another couple than read haha (specially when you're inspired!)

[sunspawn]

Oh that was such a glorious little non-cliche. Well done!!! :D

[wickedandcruel]

Thank you =)

[icarus_abides]

I thought it was bloody brilliant! Loved the running dialogue in Gillian's head. We see Cal's POV so often in stories that its always refreshing to have more Gillian. I would fantastically love to see another part added to this story, but I guess it depends on how the muse takes ya, huh?

Great job! :D

[wickedandcruel]

Thanks! =) It was fun writing Gillian, I really enjoyed it (my other fanfic is going to be from Gil's POV a well, I understand her better than Cal so any attempts at him would fail).

IDK about a second part, I'd have to know how that confrontation would go and i'd have to watch the episodes in order (after Fold Equity) so I'd keep it IC with how they are behaving afterwards.

[lunalove24]

Very well written and utterly heartbreaking. And the last two lines are just perfect. I think the story works fantastically as a stand-alone. (Even though I'm dying to find out what happens next).

[wickedandcruel]

Thank you =)

I love your icon. That scene is utterly adorable ♥