Creative Writing Assignment 1

[wighty]

Write a story about someone telling a story.  Put in as much dialogue as possible.
[Feel free to give criticism.  Or just tell me what you think.  It's not going to be graded.  This is a semi-true story.  I suffered heavy injuries to my eyes on my (older) brother's birthday and everyone was too busy with his party to notice.]

Comments

[solmedes]

Well. I don't have any indepth criticism, seeing as my brain's in the shape it's in, but...

I liked it. =3 I really did. I enjoyed the dialogue, and loved the way it just flowed between them; their speech quirks made it easier to envision them, and the reading was more fun as a result.

And that ending. [She stood] and everything aftewards -- perfect. A well-executed stroke that capped off the whole drabble nicely. ^_^ I applaud.

[wighty]

Thank you! This is the first actual writing class I've taken in college. And the first Creative Writing class I've ever taken. Hope it goes well.

[lilac_breeze]

I really enjoyed reading this. You did a fantastic job of holding my attention and I was genuinely interested through the whole thing, to the point that I was sad to see it end. Well done.

[drcanadianninja]

You had me at the summation of a Taylor series or the amplitude of magnetic flux. It was a wonderful metaphor and hooked me right in. I also like the way the story is told. It's not terribly dramatic in the retelling, more like it's a story that comes out fairly often when one needs a conversation piece. (As someone who can relate being set on fire in a matter-of-factly voice, yes, I have experience.) And right there in the beginning, the story gets sidelined to how much he did not like his brother. I liked that. The whole story didn't have a forced feeling at all, it felt like a natural telling.

Although I think my favorite part was the Encyclopedia Brown style lie detector. It was such a wonderful cap on the story.