Hi! I'm sorry for not commenting on the first part. My work won't allow me to overindulge in reading fanfics anymore. :( Anyway, I really liked the first part of this chapter since it showcased Granny Kim's and Jay's relationship. The first part was very heart-warming, to say the least. It gave us a sneak peak of what happened before and how they're faring now. I'm glad that Jay has 'matured'. Though I still don't get the whole picture, some details are clear to me now. I just need to piece them together
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Hmmm yes, bit by bit some of the secrets will be coming out. *rubs hands together* ;)
HAH! The day Yoochun finds out JJ is actually pretty wicked at tennis will be a funny one. I can imagine this cartoonish, melodramatic dropping of his jaw in a niiiice freeze-frame. XD
Seunghyun makes a valiant effort with his tennis skillz and good on him! But sometimes we must admit defeat... haha, kidding.
"Though he has the ability and skills, he'd continue to fuck up if he doesn't get his shit together." Guuurl, you should be Yunho's coach! I think you'd be great at it! hahah~ Tell it like it is
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I'm always excited to read your updates because there is something revealed every chapter. Though you don't update that often, every chapter you post is very substantial, unlike some of the fics nowadays, and as an avid Yunjae fanfic reader for 4 years (ugh. I sound so obsessed), I really appreciate this. It's glad to know that there are still authors who writes stories that are worth reading and waiting for.
I'm curious about Jaejoong's leg injury. Leg injury, his buzz, suppression... don't quite equate. I have theories, but I can't preempt the plot of this story. And where does his idol fit?
Let me go ahead and read the third part of this chapter. :)
So he hit back all of Yoochun’s boring shots, occasionally missing some, and tried to choke back the anger. It was all so easy-stuff any beginner could do-but some of the shots he missed were genuine. It was getting harder to block out the pain.
That whole scene where Jay is fighting back the anger and controlling the pain is just so vivid and angsty. It's really quite remarkable what you created there.
You are beginning to tap into the characters' complexities, humanizing them and I'm just so entertained by it I can't help but think about them. Nicely done. I can't wait for your next update.
The mind over matter thing is admirable ... but only necessary when the break down will literally tear you apart. It goes to show how much pain Jay still has. Even though in the next chapter that's a little more literal, it's obvious how much of that is emotional.
So yeah, I totally enjoyed it! I"m REALLY ENJOYING YOUR STORY AS A WHOLE. The pain, the regret ... the MEMORIES. They are all so real. It's hard not feel involved in all this.
I'm happy to see that you are still going. Even if it takes a long time to write, or to even find any time to write, your updates are always worth it. I hope you realize that.
I, myself, fell off of the Jaeho wagon some months ago but I will always continue to read your stories. Even if it's not for Jaeho, just the way you write is amazing and interesting.
I can tell from your stories though, that you aren't simply writing because you're a Jaeho fan. You write because you enjoy writing, and though your characters may be called Jaejoong and Yunho, they wouldn't have to be. I mean, you would be perfectly capable of writing amazing stories with your own characters.
haha, who knows. I am slow as a snail sometimes, so that doesn't help. But I haven't put this on any communities because I wanted to list all the parts together... I just had no idea how long it would end up taking me in the end. Oops. ><
Well, Yunho will definitely follow him. He's that kind of guy. We'll see what happens from there~
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Yunho is suffering from his own mind big time too, you're right. Stress and pressure sucks. ><
It would be nice if Jay was able to go back to tennis in any way...
Thanks for reading!
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HAH! The day Yoochun finds out JJ is actually pretty wicked at tennis will be a funny one. I can imagine this cartoonish, melodramatic dropping of his jaw in a niiiice freeze-frame. XD
Seunghyun makes a valiant effort with his tennis skillz and good on him! But sometimes we must admit defeat... haha, kidding.
"Though he has the ability and skills, he'd continue to fuck up if he doesn't get his shit together." Guuurl, you should be Yunho's coach! I think you'd be great at it! hahah~ Tell it like it is ( ... )
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I'm curious about Jaejoong's leg injury. Leg injury, his buzz, suppression... don't quite equate. I have theories, but I can't preempt the plot of this story. And where does his idol fit?
Let me go ahead and read the third part of this chapter. :)
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That whole scene where Jay is fighting back the anger and controlling the pain is just so vivid and angsty. It's really quite remarkable what you created there.
You are beginning to tap into the characters' complexities, humanizing them and I'm just so entertained by it I can't help but think about them. Nicely done. I can't wait for your next update.
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Aww, that's brilliant! I'm so glad to hear that. =D
Thank you for commenting. I hope you find the next part/chapter interesting too. ^^ <3
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So yeah, I totally enjoyed it! I"m REALLY ENJOYING YOUR STORY AS A WHOLE. The pain, the regret ... the MEMORIES. They are all so real. It's hard not feel involved in all this.
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I, myself, fell off of the Jaeho wagon some months ago but I will always continue to read your stories. Even if it's not for Jaeho, just the way you write is amazing and interesting.
I am always excited to see you have updated!
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Yeh..eek.. With this current climate (so to speak) it can be hard to find your muse and excitement but it's nice that others are still here too. ^^
Well, that has to be one of the highest compliments. I'm chuffed that you enjoy the stories for what they are. Thank you so much. <3
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I can tell from your stories though, that you aren't simply writing because you're a Jaeho fan. You write because you enjoy writing, and though your characters may be called Jaejoong and Yunho, they wouldn't have to be. I mean, you would be perfectly capable of writing amazing stories with your own characters.
That is also why I like it so much. ;)
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Well, Yunho will definitely follow him. He's that kind of guy. We'll see what happens from there~
Thank you for reading. <3
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