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Oct 14, 2007 22:56

TWISTED AND MARREDCanon one-shot ( Read more... )

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Dumbstruck jennasts October 14 2007, 13:11:06 UTC
I am sitting here in open-mouthed admiration. Wildcolumbine, don't ever hesitate to post and share with us anything you think doesn't quite work, because I am willing to bet that your standards are too high. Twisted and Marred is exquisite work. You combine the best in sentence-crafting with a laser-sharp ability to understand your characters' hearts and minds.

I am deeply, deeply moved. Please, keep writing, and...dare I say it? I would surely love to see a realistic Jack-doesn't-die AU of some length from you.... Something canon based that faces up to their mutual pain but manages to incorporate it into a future they can somehow share.

I'm tremendously impressed. I just told my husband "I have just read one of the most exquisitely-crafted short stories I've ever come across," and he immediately responded, "You need to tell the author that." So I am. You are quite a writer!
Love,
Jenna

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Re: Dumbstruck wildcolumbine October 14 2007, 13:56:35 UTC
Jenna, thank you so much for that. And thank your husband too! It's encouraging to know that things work for others even when I'm not sure about them.

I have tried a short AU and there's another in progress but I still feel the need to write canon.

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Very well written tmn1966 October 14 2007, 13:11:30 UTC
Thank you for sharing this. Beautifully written . . . but so sad. Where's my tissue. You captured Jack and Ennis so well. Thank you again.

Teri

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Re: Very well written wildcolumbine October 14 2007, 13:57:41 UTC
Yes, I'm not the cheeriest of writers. Thank you for your comments, Teri. I'm glad you "liked" it.

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Incredible! cynical21 October 14 2007, 13:22:13 UTC
I can't imagine why you'd have any misgivings about this; it is damned near perfect and captures Annie P.'s characters in a way that few fan fic efforts do. I have always believed that BbM was created to be the ultimate tragedy - that a happy ending, much as all of us might have wished for it, would have defused its true meaning, and this story illustrates that purpose beautifully by demonstrating that there was never any intention to write a Jack vs. Ennis scenario - that each of them was just as broken, just as damaged, and just as doomed as the other.

I can't imagine how anyone could have done it better. Just beautiful.

CYN

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Re: Incredible! wildcolumbine October 14 2007, 14:01:04 UTC
Cyn, that is exactly how I feel about it. They were two broken souls who needed each other to heal but who could never do it because of the horrors of their pasts. I'm so relieved that this story didn't turn out a complete disaster.

Thank you.

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Gorgeous shieldmaid1 October 14 2007, 13:38:24 UTC
Wow . . . I don't know if I've ever seen the moment where Jack faces up to the tragic reality of their inevitable separation portrayed as insightfully and beautifully as you did it here. Every paragraph rang with truth. The sensory impressions of their time together--smell, taste, touch--made their love and pain all the more real. I hope you'll decide to write and share more with us.

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Re: Gorgeous wildcolumbine October 14 2007, 14:02:19 UTC
No worries about that. I love to write about these two, painful as it is. Thank you very much for your lovely comments.

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luvjacknasty October 14 2007, 14:30:33 UTC
You have captured them perfectly! This was very sad though and I'm sitting here in tears. Those painful goodbyes, the temporary feeling of truly living that never lasts, the return to a reality neither wants, the longings, Jack trying to find oblivion- I could just go on and on about each different part of this. This was beautiful!

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wildcolumbine October 14 2007, 15:12:41 UTC
Thank you. I always think of the "things unsaid and now unsayable" and all the torment they went through for those few short weeks.

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