I am sitting here in open-mouthed admiration. Wildcolumbine, don't ever hesitate to post and share with us anything you think doesn't quite work, because I am willing to bet that your standards are too high. Twisted and Marred is exquisite work. You combine the best in sentence-crafting with a laser-sharp ability to understand your characters' hearts and minds.
I am deeply, deeply moved. Please, keep writing, and...dare I say it? I would surely love to see a realistic Jack-doesn't-die AU of some length from you.... Something canon based that faces up to their mutual pain but manages to incorporate it into a future they can somehow share.
I'm tremendously impressed. I just told my husband "I have just read one of the most exquisitely-crafted short stories I've ever come across," and he immediately responded, "You need to tell the author that." So I am. You are quite a writer! Love, Jenna
I can't imagine why you'd have any misgivings about this; it is damned near perfect and captures Annie P.'s characters in a way that few fan fic efforts do. I have always believed that BbM was created to be the ultimate tragedy - that a happy ending, much as all of us might have wished for it, would have defused its true meaning, and this story illustrates that purpose beautifully by demonstrating that there was never any intention to write a Jack vs. Ennis scenario - that each of them was just as broken, just as damaged, and just as doomed as the other.
I can't imagine how anyone could have done it better. Just beautiful.
Re: Incredible!wildcolumbineOctober 14 2007, 14:01:04 UTC
Cyn, that is exactly how I feel about it. They were two broken souls who needed each other to heal but who could never do it because of the horrors of their pasts. I'm so relieved that this story didn't turn out a complete disaster.
Wow . . . I don't know if I've ever seen the moment where Jack faces up to the tragic reality of their inevitable separation portrayed as insightfully and beautifully as you did it here. Every paragraph rang with truth. The sensory impressions of their time together--smell, taste, touch--made their love and pain all the more real. I hope you'll decide to write and share more with us.
You have captured them perfectly! This was very sad though and I'm sitting here in tears. Those painful goodbyes, the temporary feeling of truly living that never lasts, the return to a reality neither wants, the longings, Jack trying to find oblivion- I could just go on and on about each different part of this. This was beautiful!
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I am deeply, deeply moved. Please, keep writing, and...dare I say it? I would surely love to see a realistic Jack-doesn't-die AU of some length from you.... Something canon based that faces up to their mutual pain but manages to incorporate it into a future they can somehow share.
I'm tremendously impressed. I just told my husband "I have just read one of the most exquisitely-crafted short stories I've ever come across," and he immediately responded, "You need to tell the author that." So I am. You are quite a writer!
Love,
Jenna
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I have tried a short AU and there's another in progress but I still feel the need to write canon.
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I can't imagine how anyone could have done it better. Just beautiful.
CYN
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Thank you.
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