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[wildcolumbine]

THE OUTLAND

Genre: AU
Rating: NC-17 for the whole story
Feedback: Any and all is welcome
Disclaimer: These are Annie Proulx's brilliant original characters and her story, and I have treated it and them (and her) with as much respect as I can muster.
This story is for Canstandit

AUTHOR'S NOTES: I'm not especially happy with this chapter. It covers ground

Comments

[poisonperfume]

I was so happy to see this story update, I only read the previous three chapters recently and I have to tell you that I’m utterly in love it. This is one of the so very few au! stories that I personally find plausible because your Ennis and Jack completely feel like AP’s E&J, you capture their voices, their thoughts, their personalities dead on-- and the writing is sheer beauty.

This chapter was great imo, nothing short of wonderful, but the end got me worried for Ennis, should he shake off the incident with to cow so easily? I hope it’s nothing serious, it would be such a shame that after all they’ve been through something bad would happen. Thank you

Anna

[wildcolumbine]

I wouldn't stress too much about Ennis and the cow. Ranch hands have hard lives! I'm glad my J&E sounds authentic as that's what I'm striving to achieve. Thanks for commenting.

[rdg64]

Amazing things come to those who wait! I don't know if I have commented previously, but I am crazy about your story. There is so much I love about it.

The dialogue between E&J, this chapter and last, is just so so so good (I love to read every conversation they have, LOTS of times), and believable to their characters. I love Ennis's way of referring to Jack's condition(s) -- playful, authoratative, encouraging. (And I will never forget the way you had Ennis care for Jack during his coma.) You build on original Ennis's character being so tied up in the rhythms of ranch life in such interesting ways, and let him change with your AU in believable and beautiful ways. Like these:

He'd worked the big ranches where you hardly needed to pull on your cowboy boots because you hardly ever went ahorseback, where the machine shop was filled with trucks and bikes and specialised equipment, and he knew he preferred the smell of horse shit over deisel fumes. But a little outfit like the Twist ranch was doomed to slow death unless some modern

[wildcolumbine]

Thank you for that! I find writing their conversations very easy, possibly because I've been talking with them for two years now. I'm pleased that Sybil's POV worked for you. It was one of the earliest bits I wrote, before I even posted Ch 1.

[bbmjack324]

I thought this chapter was written eloquently and perfectly. You covered so much and all so good. Everything!

"Shhhh. Nothin, darlin. Everthin's fine. It's goin a be okay. I'll take care a you."...

Now he wanted to do the same to Jack, to just witness and record his beauty. Beauty, yeah, this man was beautiful....

Ennis was putting his heart and soul into it, as if, for the first time in his life he truly wanted to have Jack's cock deep in his throat and his face buried in that sweaty dark thatch....

Finally, Ennis got him pinned down, spread-eagle and helpless with laughter, every limb trapped.

[wildcolumbine]

Thank you! It's a pleasure to write it, especially when readers get some enjoyment from it.

[denim_girl2006]

Oh my, I can't see why you wouldn't be pleased with how this chapter came out. I thought it was all just wonderful. You're a remarkable writer. ♥

[wildcolumbine]

I guess it turned out okay in the end :) Thanks so much for your support, here and on DCF.

The Outland Chapter 4

[bmshirts]

Great chapter! There's absolutely nothing wrong with it.
I'm glad to see Jack and Ennis in their own place. It's really helping Jack to regain his health, let alone giving the fellas the privacy they so badly need.
Jack's first confrontation with his father was inevitable. I never understood why OMT was so certain Jack couldn't possibly have a good idea.
I hope Jack's parting from Lureen will go smoothly.
Ennis' return to bring the child support to Alma and see the girls will probably bring on a shouting match, Alma being the bitch she is! Now that Ennis has finally realized what he has with Jack, he will be able to stand up to his ex-wife. She really has no say in his life anymore.
Hope Bobby coming for a visit won't bring trouble for Jack. He's finally got the one thing he's always wanted - Ennis. Maybe Bobby could stay in the house, in Jack's old room. Of course, he'd have to listen to OMT bitch and complain about Jack, but he should be used to it from L.D. Maybe he'll even stick up for his dad.
Thanks for this update. Carole

Re: The Outland Chapter 4

[wildcolumbine]

What a great bunch of ideas! You know, half the time I don't know how people are going to react until I start writing, so on some issues I know as much as you :)

Re: The Outland Chapter 4

[bmshirts]

Thanks for the compliment. Carole