A story....

[willow705]

Getting my hair cut today.  Er...woot?  Anyways....
Tell me what you think so far (not done yet, obviously)?

Frances could not sleep that night. Each fiber of her thin sheets seemed to be weighing down on her with an extreme intensity, and her mind could not rid itself of the image of her dearest Mas’r Emmett lying cold on the shiny kitchen floor.

Comments

[operaweasel]

Story looks good so far--gripping beginning! Murder is great. Likeable protagonist, but we don't yet see the "saucy" side that Clarence describes... also, who is Clarence? Somewhat confusing. What sort of plot do you have in mind? I'm feeling a sort of secret-romance vibe. Speaking of vibe, I'm looking at the beginning of the story again, and I caught the phrase "shiny kitchen floor"...first, did they have shiny floors in Civil War-esque times? Second, this is set in Civil War-esque times, right? Third, that actually sets the mood for more of a murder mystery. Murder + romance = fabulous story.

How short are you cutting your hair? I need to find someone around the dorm to hack off some more of my own hair. Hairdressers are always afraid to really go for it.

[willow705]

oh yes indeed. murder/romance/gayness = <3
but clarence's wife hasn't come in yet. she's coming though. on her way, actually.
i had all this explaining stuff before...but decided that it was too explainy...so it sounded funny. it'll come in the dialogue i spose.
and they did have shiny kitchen floors (believe me, as the girl reading uncle tom's cabin...)

[willow705]

oh, and as for hair...you should go see my cousin! haha.
it's fairly short...same as she usually cuts it...but it normally grows out pretty fast....whatevs though.