Fic

[winged_sandals]

Title: Photo
Series: Saiyuki
Word count: 773
Warnings: worksafe, slight angsting...
Pairing(s): none really, maybe Gojyo/Hakkai if you squint
Description:  Gojyo and Hakkai and insomniac conversations over coffee.
Disclaimer: Fanfiction =/= Kazuya Minekura-fiction

Notes: I'm not sure if this story quite makes sense... Any tips would be greatly

Comments

[inksheddings]

Oh, Gojyo. ♥

I think it makes sense. I think it sounds very much like something Gojyo would feel, that he'd go through. Kind of wrapped up in the guilt he felt regarding his step-mom, like he'd ruined her happiness.

I like the unsettled feel of this very much.

[winged_sandals]

Thank you very much for reading and commenting! Poor Gojyo. He always seems to be beating himself up over things that aren't his fault Dx

[turquoise_woman]

Awww! I loved it.

I was a slice of life vignette. Tender, fumbling, akward, revealing. Good job.

PS - I squinted & liked what I saw. ~_^

[winged_sandals]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. (Squinting can always be fulfilling in these sort of situations XD )

[purpleicicles]

Wonderfully balanced between Gojyo's melancholy and the warmth of the present - I like the idea of the photo, and that being the only version of her face Gojyo wanted to remember. Plus, Gojyo's awkwardness is so endearing! *hugs Gojyo*

[winged_sandals]

Thank you! I'm glad those things worked out for you. -hugs Gojyo also-

[sharpeslass]

It seems to fit in well with what we know of Gojyo's psychology and the fact that his step-mom's face is generally partially obscured when we do see her in his flash backs. It was also a nice Hakkai/Gojyo moment.

[winged_sandals]

Yeah, the part about the flashbacks was what inspired this (or at least I think so; half the time stories just seem to appear on my desktop and I'm not sure how or why XD; ) But anyway, I'm glad things seemed somewhat believable. Thanks so much for commenting!

[meobnal]

I could really picture this scene taking place. It fits perfectly.

[winged_sandals]

Thank you! I'm glad it seemed believable