one step forward (two steps back) - part five

[withertime]

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Comments

[gemmi999]

I really, really liked this. I liked how understated the pacing was, and how Jon and Brent gradually found their way together. I enjoyed the brief look at Panic as they rose to fame, and how it affected them. I understand the ending, but I really kind of wanted Jon to join Panic! as the fifth member and have things just keep going. Have Jon there and have Brent react, but I see that that is not to be. *sigh* I hope you are writing a sequel on this one, because it deserves one. For sure. *nods*

[withertime]

Thank you so much! And yeah, the story was originally longer, but when I came to where I chose to end it, I realized that it needed to end there. But there's definitely a sequel coming - first draft is done and everything. ;)

[mayqueen517]

This was really really lovely. Understated, as the previous commenter said, and the way that Brent and Jon came together was beautiful. I love seeing Brent in fics where he's more than, "oh, that bassist guy left," and stuff, and this is a perfect way of showing how he is, I hope.

And...poor guy, because the way it seems is that he's just not one of those road people and I like that a lot. I loved all of them in this, even though my heart broke a little bit for Jon every time he and Tom had issues.

I thought this was fantastically well done. Beautiful.

[withertime]

Thank you so much! I really did want to try write something that didn't forget about Brent and somehow ended up with this. It was a chance I took, and I'm glad you liked the results.

[animealexis]

Such an awesome story, and like I said before, I would love to see a sequel. I'm not totally sure on the timeline, but I think this might be ever so slightly AU, so I have hope in Brent working out here (and Jon still finding some place with the band!). Well done, and thank you for letting me help!

[withertime]

Yeah, it's slightly AU. :) I tweaked the timelines for my own purposes (and so the ending could be tweaked as well). Sequel will be coming, as soon as I get it out of first draft stage and into final. I'm glad you liked it and thanks for the help again. :D

[yetunknown]

I think I need to rest, mentally, after this. I can see why you put the ending there but it still broke my heart.

I could actually see Panic! evolving to take Jon in through this. and how you described Jon falling in love with Brent made sense to me, like there just wasn't any other option. your writing of Tom really got to me. How Jon can see what's happening but doesn't know what to do about it but mediate petty fights really does seem frustrating. wonderful.

[withertime]

Thanks for the comment! And yeah, using that ending kind of broke my heart too, but when I wrote it, I realized that had to be the end. I'm really glad you liked it.

[magdalyna]

This is very lovely and quiet. I love how Jon sees things, and how photography translates into how he approaches life: behind the focus, not famous.

I love how Brent and Jon interacted, and how we see just how much Jon cares about the people he considers friends. Very well done.

[withertime]

Thanks a lot! :) I'm really glad you liked it.

[magdalyna]

There isn't a lot of good Brent fic on the ground, so I'm always excited to see well written work about him being produced.