Autumn's Creature Challenge: 'Calling Me'

[autumnsea]

White gossamer wings flapping like a thousand heartbeats, softly, softly, climbing the skyward streams. Houses with their lights left on call me; draw me. I feel like pressing my face, eyes dark and large, against the windowpanes and letting the radiance course through my veins. Some are sleeping; some are speaking in soft voices, televisions’

Comments

[miriyasterling]

..."I hear it calling my blood." I really love that phrase. This piece was descriptive and colorful. I found it moving. I love the way you take a creature people don't think of often as beautiful and make it just delightful. Lovely Suzy pure and utterly lovely.

[autumnsea]

I sat down to write about a dolphin and this came out. Strange how inspiration and Muses work. *chuckles*

I have always held a deep fascination with moths and also felt a resonance with them.

The line you like I changed last minute (I had it as "I hear it calling me") and I wasn't sure about it - so I'm happy to hear it worked for you!

Thank you very much, Cara. :)

[rocketpockets]

"Who says a moth is plain when she desires to die at the hands of the flame. There is a burning, deeper, stronger than physical fire."

wow. just wow.
beautiful piece.

[autumnsea]

Thank you very much, Nikki. I wasn't sure if I put too much "poetic" into this piece to be any good. I like those lines too, hon. Again, I appreciate your comment. :)

[ailaya_believes]

This is positively beautiful Suzy, I love the feel and flow.
I like these lines-
"Inside, my soul is shimmering like a thousand beacons, and I am more beautiful than the daytime’s butterfly."
And
"There is a burning, deeper, stronger than physical fire. And in the last moments, she breaks into a thousand pieces, ash-flakes upon the night wind; she glows more brilliant than the sun."

I love your use of words, it makes your writing wonderful.
:)
AJ

[autumnsea]

Thank you for the tremendous compliment, Adrianna. I am so very happy the images worked for you. :)

[ylycoyote]

So many images.....each floating, one to the other, as our moth rises from the mundane of suburbia to a sublime destiny

Well structured to support the transition of the images.

[autumnsea]

There must be a movement from mundane to sublime for me ... whether it exists in real life who is to say ... but least in my imagination I can make it happen.

Thank you Neil.

[lostincandyrain]

lovely. I also enjoyed the moving from the kind of plain and ordinary to the almost magical...

[autumnsea]

Thank you kindly, Jen.