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miriyasterling in withhumanvoices

Autumn's Picture Challenge

Mar 30, 2008 15:30

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autumnsea March 30 2008, 22:57:22 UTC

Cara, I am very impressed with this piece and think it's one of your best ones to date. I like the interpretation of the picture.

I love the repetition of the lines:

"No more do I desire wishes,
no more fanciful, delightful whims"

in the first and last stanzas.

miriyasterling March 30 2008, 23:01:54 UTC

Thank you that means a lot to me. When I look at the picture for some reason I just see a slight undertone of unhappiness maybe it's that she's bent over, or the way she holds out her arms. There was a striking subtly of defiance like someone trying to keep the world away.

lostincandyrain March 30 2008, 23:06:09 UTC

I like the defiance and the anger you gave her, refusing the wishes. And also the saddness.

miriyasterling March 31 2008, 09:00:00 UTC

It's like I mentioned to Autumn above it seems sad to me. It's a bright colorful picture but it seems like she's trying to keep the world away. I'm kind of backwards sometimes...

lostincandyrain March 31 2008, 13:38:00 UTC

No you're not; I can see that- it's in the very bent over, head down, sort of stance. You brought that part of it out really well!

ylycoyote March 31 2008, 03:19:47 UTC

Now these are lines written to be spoken, heard, and felt

The language is modern, yet the strength and sense of it are akin to the soliloquys of Hamlet and Macbeth

Any actor (male or female) could find a great deal to work with in these lines. I would love to hear someone with the strength of delivery of Cate Blanchett do these lines.

miriyasterling March 31 2008, 09:02:23 UTC

Thank you. I really enjoyed this piece the most. It was the first thing I wrote today and it turned out to be my favorite. That's interesting. Hum a voice post challenge would be fun. I think sometimes poetry and written words are such a different beast when brought to life and uttered out loud.

rebel_waltz_xo April 6 2008, 22:49:23 UTC

"No more do I desire wishes,
no more fanciful, delightful whims.
All dreams have finally gone from here,
dissipating to nothingness before my eyes."
I think you might have just won for best ending in a poem :>.

Your entire work is a really good interpretation for the picture.