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Cameron/Sarah: Time Loop 18

Dec 23, 2009 22:44

Title: Time Loop 18 ( Read more... )

Comments 31

tac04 March 6 2010, 16:30:35 UTC

Fifteen attempts? Really? I could see the first few Maria's falling victim to Cameron's Logic AI still being in place. But why did she fail all the other times? Sarah + Cameron = unstoppable team. How did they fail so many times?

wkgreen March 6 2010, 20:29:40 UTC

Two things, One: most of the times Cameron tried to do it on her own to hide the fact that she has emotions. Two, even when she included Sarah, she kept information back from Sarah, hiding her emotions from Sarah. Of course Sarah detected lies or felt manipulated and put up resistance. This is the first time Cameron has figured out how to do it without rousing her suspicions.

Hmm..maybe I should have a time loop where she fails??

Thanks for reading and commenting Tac04

tac04 March 6 2010, 23:43:22 UTC

If you do decide to do another Time Loop where she fails definitely have explosions. LOTS OF EXPLOSIONS!!! ... I like when you write explosions :P

wkgreen March 7 2010, 01:54:32 UTC

Hehe... I can do that. ;)

kittens! sscout June 3 2010, 19:06:45 UTC

Cameron states empirically <-- emphatically
Death is irrevocably and has consequences <-- irrevocable
She rubs the bridge of [her] nose in thought
main branch of the cities sewer system <-- city's
your new ID will have a comparably history <-- comparable
Cameron in the drivers seat <-- driver's
Your mission is too follow orders <-- to
who wore awoken <-- were
Maria replies matter factually <-- matter of fact, matter of factly?
saved Maria Shipkov life <-- Shipkov's
to not startled the sleeping kitten <-- startle

Re: kittens! wkgreen June 3 2010, 20:48:41 UTC

Hehe...yup. :) And thanks, made the changes. Except for the empirically one, that one I did on purpose, intention is to make Cameron sound like she is stating fact.

And I think you did more then one more. ;)

Thanks for your comments and help! :)

Re: kittens! sscout June 4 2010, 14:28:33 UTC

Empirically means 'experimentally' or 'through practice'
http://www.wordreference.com/definition/empirically

If you don't like emphatically try one of the 10 in here:
http://thesaurus.com/browse/emphatically

Re: kittens! wkgreen June 4 2010, 16:41:28 UTC

Good point and I went with factually. :)

olli01a July 21 2010, 19:26:30 UTC

I'm mostly impressed by the way Cameron finds out about John's wereabouts just from a pizza. Wonderful new part and I like the idea of Cameron not only coming back for Sarah and John. And Cameron having a kitten is cute.

wkgreen July 21 2010, 22:19:09 UTC

Thanks :) Yeah, the idea popped into my idea for Sarah to test Cameron with a pet. And a kitten seemed most appropriate. :)

sewollutak November 2 2011, 03:45:00 UTC

Great, I never knew this, thanks.

wkgreen November 2 2011, 05:07:10 UTC

Glad you liked it. :)