Sarah/Cameron: Time Loop 22

[wkgreen]

Comments

[kallaan]

First!

My Sunday morning is a delight, thanks to you.

It is a true sensuality in your writing and it's a pleasure when it's used to describe the interaction between Sarah and Cameron.

And thanks for the sexy pink bra ;)

[wkgreen]

Got to include the pink bra. :)

Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for commenting. :)

[storm_8]

It's quite impressive how you managed to include some funny bits in between all the sensuality. Very nicely done.

Ha, and the pink bra - so totally Cameron!

[wkgreen]

Thanks! heh, insert funny comment about sex (on tip of tongue but not coming put!)

Hehe...yes it is. :)

Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for commenting. :)

[anonymous]

I really, really like this series, but the style of last ones changed a bit. You have used the word 'Cameron' 198 times, and 'Sarah' 151 times in this story. I think this is a bit distracting (at least for me). I'm not a native English speaker and my English is quite low level, so I may be wrong. Apart from this, I enjoyed the story, thank you.

[wkgreen]

Hmmm... you know, you are right, I used Cameron's and Sarah's names too many times. I should have replaced their names with physical descriptors. ( head slap )

Thanks for the feedback! :)

[1shinyboat]

Not a bad edition to the series. Throwing in my hat with Anonymous above me, I think that having a beta reader will help. I love your Time Loop series and given the time between posts, if you want a beta reader, I can lend a hand. Can't spell really well, but I'm decent at pretty much everything else.

I'll leave the idea open for you to mull over and PM if you so choose.

Thanks for the Sunday mornin' lovin'!

[wkgreen]

Glad you enjoyed overall and happy to provide the morning loving. ;)

I will probably take you up on the beta reading offer. My grammar isn't good, although I can spell and I know how to use spell check. ;)

[wkgreen]

Thank you and glad you enjoyed it. :)