You're in a car with a beautiful boy, Dean. ( Part II )

[wnchster]

This is one of those feelings you don’t want to name. It’s

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[obstinatrix]

the rain sheets down and his voice comes out so small, “Kiss me back.”

- broke me. Damn, girl, you are so good.

[wnchster]

Oh jings, thank you!

[wnchster]

Thank you, I'm really glad you liked it man. (:

[doctorinchains]

Just lovely - I really liked how you emphasized Dean's need here and how that need actually liberated him. Beautifully written - thank you!

[wnchster]

Thank you, I'm really glad you liked it! Oh jings, I wish I had more to say than just thank you, trololo~

[cherie_morte]

Wow. Just wow. I really love Richard Siken's poetry and the fact that he ships it, so I clicked the story out of curiosity and I am just stunned. You didn't just do honor to the poem, you went beyond it. Retained the lovely flow of his words while making it so, so, painfully perfect for these two.

I loved the two contrasting POVs, both so perfect. I could not stop aching through either of them, they were so in character and the atmosphere was so thick with desperation and need and, best of all I think, inevitability. There were so many gorgeous lines I can't feed them all back to you, but I have to bring this one up because I think it just *is* so much of Dean: But your mind recoils and it’s back to square one all over again - getting stuck in the webs of right, wrong and what’s best for Sammy and not you.

Thanks so much for sharing these gorgeous bits! Made my ill-advised fanfiction-instead-of-class reading time especially rewarding! >:)

[wnchster]

Oh man, your comment made rather giddy.
I didn't think people would like it all that much because of the POV but jingscrivens, thank you for your comments.

[locknkey]

he so ship s it. :)

[cherie_morte]

Dude, it's compulsive. He cannot stop shipping it. He tries, and then the poem only comes out shippier.

IT'S A SICKNESS.

[winsangel]

This is beautiful, and broken, and brutally raw.... just like our boys. Thank you for sharing and I hope to read more of your work!

[wnchster]

With everyone's lovely comments I'll most definitely be popping more of my work up! Thank you!