Comments | wolfieris: not free flowing shit poetry

wolfieris

not free flowing shit poetry

Jun 17, 2005 20:44

Free flowing poems laugh and see ( Read more... )

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P.S. wolfieris June 17 2005, 17:57:33 UTC

sorry i haven't been keeping up w/ lj for a while...i've been a bookworm and tearing my brain apart trying to figure out why then hell i'm taking 3 AP courses next year along with honors trig *and* german IV. damn me.

silverladys9sf June 17 2005, 19:37:28 UTC

I like this poem!! Nicely done! :D

Your schedule sounds scary. :(

thanx wolfieris June 18 2005, 13:22:29 UTC

it is scary...i think i went temporarily insane

Re: thanx looseleaves June 18 2005, 15:51:12 UTC

I have the same type of schedule (AP US, AP lit, AP enviro, honors trig, French IV) and I'm not worried at all, actually. Hm.

rhaniha June 18 2005, 17:04:20 UTC

I like your poem, but... this line "consumes a fat, white, folly rat" seems a little forced. So does the last stanza. It doesn't seem to match with the first; I really like the first stanza and the first two lines of the second, best of all. Nice job, but I would consider reworking some of it. :-)

wolfieris June 19 2005, 12:12:41 UTC

i completely agree actually, but i was frustrated so the reworking didn't take place before i posted it.

thx for commenting..it's been a while

rhaniha June 20 2005, 13:17:55 UTC

Your welcome. I'm not online much anymore. :-p I hope you're doing well.

wolfieris June 21 2005, 15:07:23 UTC

no, you aren't. i'm quite fine...have you written anything more? and did you get your story published yet?

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tactheantidog June 19 2005, 06:32:02 UTC

hey excellent stuff. :D kudos!

wolfieris June 19 2005, 12:13:16 UTC

why thank you, thank you very much =P