Lost (but honest) vs. Misled (and dishonest)

[wolvenheartnano]

Some superior force is apparently putting Aislin on the front-line here. ;P I did the random draw again, 'lo and behold, her name came up, with Braedon as her opponent this time. For the next few draws I'm going to take her name out, just so someone else gets a turn. ;) By the way, I'd just like to state again that this is at 'the beginning', so

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[flickguy]

Might it have worked better ("leav[ing] out the obvious tags") to write it from her point of view? That way you're only talking about how she sees his behaviors, and you don't have a chance for the "tags".

Just something to wonder, because I'm weird like that. :)

I guess what I'm wondering is, when you're writing scenes with him, will you be doing them from his POV? If so, I don't know that there's an "honest" way to write him without revealing his true motivations.

(Yay! I'm being annoying!)

Sorry.

[wolvenheartnano]

You're not being annoying. ;P I understand what you're saying. Really, if it's his POV there's no real way not to show what he's thinking or that he's being dishonest. (At this point in the story) I think when they first meet him at Nadoc it will be in Aislin's POV. Thank you for bringing that up, it really helps. :)

[a_dark_bard]

Just wanted to pop in real quick and say thanks for adding me back so quick. . . here's to a great Month, ne? ^.^