A short story of sorts

[wonderwall178]

I wrote this a long time ago, i'd really appreciate an audience, I'd appreciate it being read if you would be so kind as to voice your opinion, i would gladly like to read them. Keep in mind it isnt gramatically edited since i wrote it.....and its long.

The Burrrrrito I crouched onto a rusty bench as the train whizzed by and then quickly

Comments

[idealdecimation]

that's a really great story, it got me thinking about people that have impacted my life, and still do. you should post more often. the end.

[wonderwall178]

Thank you :D

BURRITO TO GO

[babarambob]

hey riri ~ you are a natural narrative writer ~ if you wrote THAT "a long time ago" i'd sure like to see what you're writing now! great writing kiddo from bobBo

Re: BURRITO TO GO

[wonderwall178]

hah
unfortunately i have a problem sharing my writing. :/

THE HEART OF THE MATTER

[babarambob]

Hi Riri ~ Ah... so you've arrived at the Existential Question at the heart of all writing? Well, sorry but you're a WRITER and writers have to write and unfortunately readers have to read what you write to keep the UNIVERSE in harmony... so there from bobBo

burrrrrrrrrrrrrrito

[ihopeurlegal]

that was purdyful. i loved the detail and imagery...i really got immersed in the story. tho the funny thing is, i pictured a lil riri and a lil liat instead.. i guess because i've seen so many photos of her it was easy to cast her in the role. you really should post more of these alongside the photos. i luv ya cause yer cute n goofy, but the talent's what drew me in ;)

pps. i like how you snuck cotton candy into there . teehee

Re: burrrrrrrrrrrrrrito

[wonderwall178]

ha yeah, i suppose liat fits in there nicely. :)
thank you!

and cotton candy = <3

[crumbles_todust]

wow.
that really was great.
and im glad im part of your Family and that i know margarita.

and writing runs in the family yo.
:)

[wonderwall178]

:)
thanks zan.

[babarambob]

hey riri ~ happy groundhog day from bobBo