did you write that? ok that was.....spooky (for a lack of a better word, sry...) But in a good way. I loved the repetition of houses, and dead men...and "selling pieces of heaven", omg i got chills.
low water bridges...wut an interesting title. I shall read this one again later bcoz I know I am not going deep enough right now, my brain's dead. but I shall try again tomorrow. ♥
i wrote it in response to several challenges in a poetry community... the phrase "they were selling pieces of heaven" was one of the challenges given.
i come from a small town with plenty of streams and low water bridges on country backroads, and the fact that schools close because of the flooding is true.. if the buses can't run, they sometimes would close school. this is sort of a spooky feel because of the element of loneliness and emptiness that i was trying to convey, so i can see that.
thanks for your comments. i'll look forward to more feedback if you do get a chance to read it again later. =)
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ok that was.....spooky (for a lack of a better word, sry...) But in a good way.
I loved the repetition of houses, and dead men...and "selling pieces of heaven", omg i got chills.
low water bridges...wut an interesting title.
I shall read this one again later bcoz I know I am not going deep enough right now, my brain's dead.
but I shall try again tomorrow.
♥
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i wrote it in response to several challenges in a poetry community... the phrase "they were selling pieces of heaven" was one of the challenges given.
i come from a small town with plenty of streams and low water bridges on country backroads, and the fact that schools close because of the flooding is true.. if the buses can't run, they sometimes would close school. this is sort of a spooky feel because of the element of loneliness and emptiness that i was trying to convey, so i can see that.
thanks for your comments. i'll look forward to more feedback if you do get a chance to read it again later. =)
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