Cthonic Ballads

[workingboy]

So, I wrote a ballad set roughly in the Cthulhu mythos. It was extremely hard to force ancient one gibberspeech into iambic trimeter/tetrameter alternating.

Comments

[lithwen]

!!! I like it. Think the ending could be a tiny bit stronger, but overall, I like it good. :)

It's a retelling of a story of the same nature?

[workingboy]

Thanks!
And its not a retelling, it's just set in a particular horror/sci-fi universe. Well, I lied. The basic idea of the mother thinking her baby was a demon came from another ballad called "The Changeling" (whose author's name escapes me at the moment) but in that poem Jesus eventually helps her see that it's not a demon, but a baby. Here, there's less Jesus and more demon.

[balathustrius]

Yay demons! Fuck Jesus! Azathoth cancelled his return.

[podyma]

Well, I'm impressed. I like that even though you say you had to "force" it into the ballad form, few of the lines come off as hackneyed.

[midget_of_doom]

Off in R'lyeh,
Cthulhu smiles while checking his internets.

[balathustrius]

Cthulhu smiles?

I want a smiling Cthulhu plushie.

[midget_of_doom]

When Cthulhu smiles a baby's genitalia explodes somewhere.

:o NO PLUSHIE FOR YOU. Maybe a Nyalarthotep.