A lonely house

[wr84u]

First PhaseThe night lost its appeal as the moon had had a wonderful sleep and yet though it was late night and Monisha expected some sounds of stirring wings of the birds, unfortunately no sounds heard that night. She jerked when suddenly a glowworm screamed and stopped recently as if a python was ready to gulp a frog and it tried its best to had

Comments

[anonymous]

Good. Now Your sentences have been developed than those of past. Continue your practice. You also can start your preparation for bcs from now as it needs continuos practice to cope with comp
etition. Best of luck.

[anonymous]

carry on..friend

[ext_3019388]

the beginning of this story was really nice , we all can say that
but in my opinion in this story the writer was in rush , as like the person just wanted to finish it so soon, i don't know much but i think in this story we need some stability or little more touchy and loving words
not like just describe any incident but like telling a story a very special story which is very close to the writer , so don't make it like just a description
and at the end i can say it was really very good , but i know i can hope for the best from u
wish u good luck and lots of love for u baby