A very harsh, bleak picture of what's inside Desmond now that he's getting more and more Bleeding-Effecty (if that's not a word it should be^^), and how much he wants to hide it, and can't.
And a good insight into Shaun, who draws Des' pain out of him to try to help, and hides his own pain to spare Des even more. *wibble*
I've been trying to write something AC for the past week. Managed it at first - got a couple ficlets out of Subject 16 - but with Eric, or with an older Ezio, it is very difficult.
I like these sorts of fics and wish I can do them better. There's a certain subtlety to pieces like this I am fond of.
Then again I am fond of the author as well <3 /squish
Oh, you can do them better, love! I learned most of this stuff off reading your work, so I'm certain that you can do them brilliantly. Takes a certain kind of mood in my case, though.
I'm glad you liked it! <3 I look forward to those ficlets.
It's lengthy without being overdone or excessive. Everything in it is there with reason. You are definitely learning to get into longer pieces or scenes and you're doing them well.
This is a deep piece. Thinking about the implications of living multiple lives and the effect it could have on one's identity is pretty amazing. I hadn't even thought of these things, and you've thrust them to the fore in a very moving way.
Good dialog, good emotion, good description... You've really captured something here.
Awww, thank you! I'm glad to know I'm improving - that's always the difficult bit with me. I never know whether I'm improving or not, so it becomes irritating to write, since I feel like I'm just standing in the same place.
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A very harsh, bleak picture of what's inside Desmond now that he's getting more and more Bleeding-Effecty (if that's not a word it should be^^), and how much he wants to hide it, and can't.
And a good insight into Shaun, who draws Des' pain out of him to try to help, and hides his own pain to spare Des even more. *wibble*
Beautiful writing, keep it up!
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I am glad you like it! <3 And yes, I agree, it should definitely be a word xD Would make describing Desmond so much easier.
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I've been trying to write something AC for the past week. Managed it at first - got a couple ficlets out of Subject 16 - but with Eric, or with an older Ezio, it is very difficult.
I like these sorts of fics and wish I can do them better. There's a certain subtlety to pieces like this I am fond of.
Then again I am fond of the author as well <3 /squish
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I'm glad you liked it! <3 I look forward to those ficlets.
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It's lengthy without being overdone or excessive. Everything in it is there with reason. You are definitely learning to get into longer pieces or scenes and you're doing them well.
This is a deep piece. Thinking about the implications of living multiple lives and the effect it could have on one's identity is pretty amazing. I hadn't even thought of these things, and you've thrust them to the fore in a very moving way.
Good dialog, good emotion, good description... You've really captured something here.
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Glad you liked it <3
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