Chapters 2 and 3 of my book *comment please!!*

Apr 30, 2005 21:12

I finnally updated you guys!!! This ones pretty long but i think it's pretty good so please read and comment!! ( Read more... )

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faith_found01 May 1 2005, 02:37:04 UTC
Chapter one may as well be entitled My Life....cuz thats basically exactly how i was when i was young, more twords past 2nd grade though. I remember in second grade, you would chase me around the play ground, was that jus to be like everyone else? jus wondering. I think if you stayed in that grade we would have been good friends.

Critiquing: theres really not much i can cuz it was wonderful, i cant say much though cuz it hit me a special way since i shared it, hehe...

Chapter 3: Its pretty good, abit short and you should add abit to it if you want but over all its pretty good. Still, if you put this book on the shelf id be first in line to buy.

Great work

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writeaholic707 May 1 2005, 17:47:48 UTC
thanks

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Dude I just commented and it dissapeared! lilloads May 1 2005, 21:10:03 UTC
Chapter two was amazing, just like Jon said it reminded me of myself, I think that is what's so great about it, everyone in some form or another can realate to it, everyone has been tormented, teased. Granit some more then others but still it happends. I love how you talk about the struggles a young girl can have, many parents see childhood as the easiest time in a persons life, but I have found it quite hard..

Tell me how in so few words chapter three brought me to tears, I will tell you. The vivid picture engraved in my memory of these to lovers battling to overcome nature is amazing, it leaves you pondering the fate of the women, as if even though you bearly know her, you are connected somehow..

Amazing Steph. I am in love with you. :)

(PS. I'm starting my book in five minutes, I've drawn up some ideas. I am gonna make a journal just for that. So I'll send you the link when its up)

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add in lilloads May 1 2005, 21:11:02 UTC
This story, just like you, has that amazing spark of fantasy mixed with reality that could bring the most corparate stone face to tears.

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writeaholic707 May 2 2005, 00:48:01 UTC
I got to read your story when you start it!! And thank you so much your opinion is so important to me because i know your truthful and your just an amazing writer! I love you amanda you own my heart <3 ;-D

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hey steph troubldheart May 2 2005, 01:08:07 UTC
This was really interesting to me and kind of made me sad. I feel really bad right now because when I first met you I judged you. I am proud of the person you have become, inspite of the cruelities(sp?) of the world. This makes me even more excited to continute this bible study with you. See you thursday.
<33maria

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Re: hey steph writeaholic707 May 2 2005, 01:13:54 UTC
Thank you very much that made my night! ya i can't wait either see you then! <3

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troubldheart May 3 2005, 01:26:48 UTC
hey do you have a screen name? mines thetransition874 if you want to IM me sometime.

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writeaholic707 May 3 2005, 20:00:47 UTC
ya mines Secretwriter07 (it's lame i know) :-b

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