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[writeontarget]

Title: I'm Selfish and I'm Sad
Pairing: Jalan. Who the hell else nowadays?
Notes: For the prompt but it don't snow here/it stays pretty green/I'm going to make a lot of money/then I'm going to quit this crazy scene.

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[_ravengirl]

“But you won, not me,” Jacob utters, baffled.
“Did I?” Kalan asks, and there’s a certain lingering sadness in his eyes that Jacob has never seen before. ♥

Agh, I really shouldn't have started reading the already posted fics before posting mine because it makes me want to scrap what I've written and start all over. Anyway, this was gorgeous though. I love the writing in it and the characterization and the fact that it's not really a story it's more just bits and pieces put together that make the reader infer what's in between and what's happened afterwards. Argh, I'm so not eloquent today. Anyway, point being this was gorgeous and I'm always amazed and slightly jealous of how beautiful you write :)

[kissedbythegods]

I love you so much for saying that, because I felt like this was disjointed, awkward and unfinished. It actually got to the point that I just wanted to post it because it wasn't making sense to me anymore. So, thank you <3

[camm_shenylle]

Heartbreaking.

[kissedbythegods]

In a good way, I hope. Thank you.

[canuckistani_j]

He rubs the back of his hand across tired eyes and tries to forget that they both share the same favourite book, the one that is found in the drawers of hotel room tables by which Jacob has fucked pretty girls while trying not to whimper his name.

OH GOD. Just... augh. So good it hurts, as the best lines always are. Actually, this whole thing is good like that.
Fantastic, really. :)

[kissedbythegods]

Thank you so much!

[emcy]

Oh. Oh man. I've eaten this one like... like... um, I'm falling short of an expression, but what I mean is that I've taken it in one generous gulp and it was very, very delicious even if it stung a bit. Yay, I'm comparing a fic to alcohol. I'm sorry if it doesn't make sense, I should be in bed! My current state didn't take away from the intensity when I read it, though. Not at all.

As I was reading, I was plunged into the imagery and each line, every word was even more poignant/significant than the last, it was amazing and it kept getting heavier and heavier (in a good wholesome way, not in an insufferable way). I hear that from time to time for other people, but this time it is my turn to feel this way: I could quote the whole thing, it was full of little gems. But, I will choose a few favourites anyhow, and hope that it won't end up being the whole thing, lol!

he can’t see past flashes of cameras and his own goddamn grandeurI love this, because a common argument that I've heard about old!Jake versus now!Jake is that he pretty much

[kissedbythegods]

Oh, I never know what to say to your comments, Emcy! I can't do this justice right now really, so I'm going to have to hope that you'll settle for a thank you! You manage to leave incredible feedback every time, and I definitely appreciate it!

[emcy]

Oh yes, no problem! Just knowing that you have read it is more than enough. You write something, and then get responses. Sometimes that sparks a discussion, sometimes it doesn't. It doesn't matter either way, we both take something from it from the start. :)