Nameless.

[artittle]

I've been working on a book called Nameless. It's about a girl named Rain who tragically looses her mother when she turns 17. She tries to cope but because she is unable to she turns to all the wrong things to help her. After some property damage she meets a woman named Miss Maddie who immediately is consumed with compassion for the young woman.

Comments

[jexia]

You lost me when you used the wrong "too" in the second sentence.

[artittle]

Oops. Typo. I typed it from my phone. Little bitty keys! . Thanks for the advice..

[wwwac]

Good writing. I'm confused by the first sentence though, it sounds like Ms. Maddie is still alive, but by the 3rd sentence she's lifeless. Is Rain looking back to Ms. Maddie's death?

Anyway, I'm already curious about this story, write more, please!