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[POTC fic] - "In Situ" - rated NC-17

Mar 13, 2007 01:03

Title: "In Situ"
Fandom: Pirates of the Caribbean
Spoilers: Post (my hypothetical) AWE
Pairing: Will/Elizabeth, Jack/Elizabeth
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 3,815
Disclaimer: I don't own POTC or any of the people in it. They belong to Disney. Would that I was that rich....
Summary: Oneshot that begs the question, what if Elizabeth married Will? This is ( Read more... )

potc, oneshot, fic

Comments 30

erinya March 13 2007, 06:32:58 UTC

Wow. Hotness. I really like the way you acknowledge Elizabeth's feelings for both men in this. And the way Will understands more than she guesses.

Am useless for further comment at this time, but I'm always happy to see fic from you.

writing_samsara March 14 2007, 01:34:17 UTC

Oh, thank you some much, darlin! I'm glad you enjoyed this little foray, and I hope you're doing well. :)

I felt a bit guilty not sending this to you for the usual beta, but I know how busy you've been. Many hugs, and it's brilliant to "see" you here. Mouwah!

compassrose7577 March 13 2007, 10:59:45 UTC

You sly girl!!!! It's great! You've worked your magic again. There is a rhythm to your words that I find enrapturing--they draw you in and keep your there. So few words, and yet a mouthful.

It's an intriguing exploration of the down side of three friends. It's difficult to live with the haunts of your significant others' past.

I love your contrasts between J and W in their 'skills'.

A great read! Now all I have to do is explain to my classes today where the smile is coming from. Maybe, best not.

If this is a sample of what you've been up to, I can't wait!!!

compassrose7577 March 13 2007, 11:53:41 UTC

Had more time to read it again---just had to!

It's a very sensitive look into the lull that inevitably follows the storm of romance. You live for the 'happily everafter' and then look around, wondering where it went. Especially for two, well three, firey people, the drudge of day-to-day life could be paralyzing. Love is dirty socks in the floor, isn't it?

The desperation of Jack's last attempt is wonderful. An impetuous move from an impetuous man. I'm wondering how Jack would manage to separate lust from love.

And by the way, just on a completely, self-serving note: Thank you for making Jack the "bigger"....ooops!

writing_samsara March 14 2007, 01:41:24 UTC

"You sly girl!!!! It's great! You've worked your magic again. There is a rhythm to your words that I find enrapturing--they draw you in and keep your there. So few words, and yet a mouthful."
--- Oh, thank you so much! This was a wonderful little break from my still-plodding work on the massive C.3, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for your compliment on my style. The fear is always the opposite: too many words and too little taste in the mouth. ;)

"A great read! Now all I have to do is explain to my classes today where the smile is coming from. Maybe, best not."
--- Hee hee - this makes me think of my day. I was running a training class for management, and kept checking my website for comments via my PDA. It was thrilling, and I was beaming like a fool the entire time.

More fic is most assuredly on the way: C.3, of course, and side projects abound. *squish* Thanks for reading!

writing_samsara March 14 2007, 01:54:43 UTC

Ok, so I am an idiot - forgot to respond to your second comment. *smacks head ( ... )

artaxastra March 13 2007, 12:19:21 UTC

She has got herself a tangle, hasn't she? *g*

This situation can't hold, can't stay the same. It's not balanced, for all she and Will think that's what they chose, and something will tip it over the edge. It might be Jack. It might be a baby. It might be a hurricane or Gov. Swann's death or a change in the wind. But something will change it all.

I really like the way you laid out the problem deftly, showing us what the issues are, where the instablities are, without pushing. Very skilled! And without blaming anyone. Because they're good people, both of them, but it's not a good match deep down.

Excellent! I enjoyed this so much!

writing_samsara March 14 2007, 03:48:25 UTC

Thank you so much for the lovely comment. I really, really appreciate your feedback, and I am thrilled that you enjoyed this - especially since I hold your work in such high regard. Thanks ( ... )

versifico March 13 2007, 14:48:35 UTC

Oh...beautiful, lovely, wonderful morning gift! I have been craving something from you and was pleasantly surprised to find something new today. I do believe this is my favorite piece from you yet. You have captured everything about Elizabeth's relationship with both men I've never been able to put into words here:

“Choose, Elizabeth,” she had urged herself. “Choose now. Do you select the man who knows where you come from, who knows the details of your history like his own palm, who will steady you in any storm, and who will worship your every move? Or do you pivot into Jack’s arms, into the tangle of danger and passion and uncertainty? Do you grasp at him, cradle him like seawater in cupped hands until, inevitably, he slides between your fingers, too liquid to hold? Do you turn to the man that knows who you were, or to the man that knows who you are becoming? Shall you run to the man that offers equilibrium, or to the man that stands your equal? Do you choose, in the end, the balance or the challenge?”This is just so clear and ( ... )

writing_samsara March 14 2007, 14:51:32 UTC

"Oh...beautiful, lovely, wonderful morning gift! I have been craving something from you and was pleasantly surprised to find something new today ( ... )

sage_laurel March 13 2007, 15:11:57 UTC

I loved the way you showed the marital discord with the underlying affection and understanding, as marriage usually is. And though I am a die-hard Sparrabethian, I like fics that acknowledge what Will and Liz have been through. Its canon, so cant really be ignored if one wants to remain true to character. Youve done it beautifully; written the experience and tenderness of the marriage as well as the passion and fire of the affair.
Well done!

-Laurel

writing_samsara March 14 2007, 14:59:08 UTC

"I loved the way you showed the marital discord with the underlying affection and understanding, as marriage usually is."
--- Thanks so much! Was channeling my own marriage here. My husband was my high school sweetheart, and as annoyed as I can get with him - and as restless - I can never really shake that fact that he knows me in a way that no other man ever could, because of our history and because of how we grew up together, changing eachother as we evolved in our individual ways.
And I totally make him do all the housework, even though he's more "traditional" than me (and probably wishes I would do it). ;)And of course the other side of it - the Jack/Lizzie side - is coming from a bit of my knowledge of the other side of the coin.

"Youve done it beautifully; written the experience and tenderness of the marriage as well as the passion and fire of the affair."
--- Thank you so much! *many squishes*