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[POTC fic] - "In Situ" - rated NC-17

Mar 13, 2007 01:03

Title: "In Situ"
Fandom: Pirates of the Caribbean
Spoilers: Post (my hypothetical) AWE
Pairing: Will/Elizabeth, Jack/Elizabeth
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 3,815
Disclaimer: I don't own POTC or any of the people in it. They belong to Disney. Would that I was that rich....
Summary: Oneshot that begs the question, what if Elizabeth married Will? This is ( Read more... )

potc, oneshot, fic

Comments 30

djarum99 March 15 2007, 03:30:22 UTC

You know how much I love this. I looked for it on sparrabeth, didn't find it, and forgot to check my flist. I am reduced to commenting on what has already been said with such enthusiasm. (I do hope you're listening, and come back to this with any future self-doubt ( ... )

writing_samsara March 15 2007, 17:10:37 UTC

"You know how much I love this. I looked for it on sparrabeth, didn't find it, and forgot to check my flist ( ... )

hereswith March 15 2007, 22:22:32 UTC

This makes my heart ache. It's like... something is bound to break, something is teetering, about to fall, and it's inevitable. You convey all the complicated emotions here so well, it feels very real, the choice Elizabeth has to make and the difficulty she has making it. The dream is deliciously hot, too ;-) The writing is beautiful throughout, but I'll just quote a couple of things...

She ticks off her burdens on roughened fingers: twelve hours and one thousand, three hundred forty days wasted at the expense of her own joy, her life slipping away in swift strokes. That's painful.

...haloed in half-light beyond his sea-soaked lashes, the weight of the ocean still heavy beneath his ribs... Gorgeous rhythm here.

“Been ‘Bess’ in me head all this time, luv. And ‘Lizzie’. And ‘Doom’, in the mornin’. Now for the love of God, Elizabeth, tell me.”
“Yes. Please, yes.” *thud*

She stands bow-backed with her arms spread wide, the breeze anointing her skin in long, salty breaths, the air running through her splayed fingers like water between ( ... )

writing_samsara March 16 2007, 01:03:27 UTC

Thank you so much for the wonderful, detailed comment! :) Feedback as lovely as yours really makes my evening ( ... )

ooshadygirloo March 16 2007, 21:26:59 UTC

ah, such lovely writing. now i want to read more of your work. i've been reading a lot of piratemistresses fics lately, and i came across one of your comments, and just from that alone i came here and, just as i thought i would, i like your fic! and i bet i'll like the others too. ;-)

writing_samsara March 18 2007, 22:35:41 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm so glad that you chanced a peek over here and that you enjoyed yourself. :) I do hope you like the other stories. Thank for the lovely feedback, and for reading! *hugs*