Well, this made me cry...really it did. I love how you open with a very flippant tone and a more poetic look to the line breaks. But then you move to your own structure and poem becomes much more serious. As always, you have a beautiful way of stringing words and ideas together so that indivudal lines blend together into the whole. It's fast-paced and attacks the reader like a furious series of boxing jabs. But the poem holds itself together and has that on the edge feel that you must be feeling as you wrote this. I love the ending of wanting to escape into the matinee world that reminds us of the opening in which the poet is trying to enter that "make believe but perfect world". I felt your pain here, and I'm sorry you're going through all this. It doesn't sound fair to have all of this to deal with at any age, but especially since you're so young.
so now we look at the pending silver lining should it decide to peek through and we wait and we wait to jusitify why it's not there until finally we realize the it exists around you beside you behind you in front of you as you call for those rides and we are all here because we want to be not because you asked us to be and when you are stuck at the bottom of the barrel then we build the chain once again to all climb out because that's how we roll dear friend of mine for as long as we're all here you can't be rid of us because we are all the glue that holds us all together and it was you that helps a person to realize it but i won't stand by and pretend to understand what ticks in your head because you tick differently than me but the point remains that i am still standing by behind you beside you in front of you because crossing my eyes to make you smile is all the reason i need to stay and i will keep doing it to make you realize that we will always be here we will be here to kick your heels if you try to stop walking forward and
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