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Fanfic: Nights Like Those

Jul 03, 2008 16:15

Title: Nights Like Those
Fandom: Twilight
Pairing: Jacob/Bella
Rating: PG-13 (mild swearing)
Warnings: Slightly AU. Edward doesn't return to Forks after Bella's first day of school.
Summary: "Everyone at school was convinced she was in love with that kid from La Push. 'I'm not dating him,' she protested weakly, but no one would believe her."
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jacob/bella, fanfiction, twilight

Comments 12

stretch July 4 2008, 06:52:01 UTC

If only the books were like this...

Lovely job, my dear.

caitlinsici July 4 2008, 17:01:23 UTC

SMeyer should be taking notes from you ;)

wolfgirl1618 July 5 2008, 20:14:10 UTC

Whoa! Absolutely wonderful!!! Jacob is just BETTER than Edward, in every conceivable way. Gorgeous writing. I hope you're planning on writing more fanfic, because I loved this!

asherz86 August 15 2008, 01:07:46 UTC

loved it!! especially jake's phone call to bella after the kiss. haha, so cute

hazy_crazy June 22 2009, 02:23:27 UTC

I read this at jakeandbells (and reviewed I think?), and I happened upon it again and decided to read it for a second time lol. I love it... it is probably one of my fave Jake/Bells fics. This is EXACTLY the way I imagine their relationship to have progressed if the Cullens were out of the picture :)

I noticed a couple of mistakes:
But thinks with Jake were never like that

and

Bella went with with the first thing

But that's it :P Your writing is flawless otherwise, and it's lines like these that make your writing style awesome: Bella had a hard time trying to picture their pale, cruel beauty against a sunny backdrop of palm trees and sand. . :D

Your Jake is gorgeous and I want him LOL :P I also liked your Bella. They both were very much in character. :)

So yes, that was my insanely long comment on your fantastic fic ;)