LJ Idol Week 7: Brouhaha

[wyrdfishes]

(This is my post for therealljidol .  Other entries for this week can be found here.)

"WHAT THE FUCK IS THIS?"

Time stopped.  The morning bustle of the café, the clinks and rattles and laughs and chair scrapes, fell to petrified silence.  I looked up from my laptop at my usual table by the kitchen.  Everybody was staring at the table in the middle where

Comments

[basric]

I enjoyed it and can see it happening. Very well done.

[wyrdfishes]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

[imafarmgirl]

This was priceless! Did he get banned for good?

[wyrdfishes]

The actual guy that this story was based on...you know, I don't know if he ever did or not. He certainly got banned more than once, though. But I think the restaurant owners felt sorry for him and kept letting him back.

[the_vernacular]

I really liked this; I liked the details you chose to include. You did a good job of balancing observational details with your personal opinions of what you were observing, which created a really good narrative voice.

[wyrdfishes]

Wow, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. :D

[myrna_bird]

Very good storytelling. It seemed realistic and I could picture this place and all the characters through the excellent narration.

[wyrdfishes]

Cool, thanks so much! :)

[alphaloria]

I really feel like I'm there. You're a wonderful writer.

[wyrdfishes]

Thank you for the kind words! I think you're a pretty awesome writer too!