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[lokmarie]

Sorry I haven't been active lately

Comments

[berru]

I'm not sure, but i think i like it.

[plathapuss]

Hmmm I'm not too sure what I think about the use of visual words in here and where the point lies in doing that, the only reason I think is to put emphasis but it would be better to put them in italics. But yeah I do really think there is something in this, nice work.

[lokmarie]

thank you:-) I put in the visual words because I thought it helped give it the kind of shaky feeling it has-like someone after crying.