It Was The Smartest Thing I Ever Did, Because Now You're Here (6/?)

[x_avecia_x]

Title: It Was The Smartest Thing I Ever Did, Because Now You're Here
Author: x_avecia_x
Rating: PG-13
Warning: A few sweary words, nothing too shocking.
Word Count: 3,171
Disclaimer: I do not own Community - although I would totally marry Dan Harmon then claim half in our (inevitable) divorce settlement - that is unless he conceeds to my end game Jeff/Annie

Comments

[classicfreak]

ALL MY CREYS!
I love it. Mr. Edison definitely seems like the type of guy to punch Jeff in the face, while Ms. Edison seems like the kind of person I want to punch in the face.
Can I just love you even more for the kiss that gave me a ton of feelings? Jeff, you kissed and because she is the mother of your child, and the attention you're used to will be transferred to your child. You love her and you're falling harder for her because of the fetus. It's a legit love.
Annie, you allowed the kiss to go on because the man you love gave you another human to love, your hormones are on the fritz, and Jeff stood up to your parents on your honor. Thaks effing adorable!

And this is the part of the comment.t where I plead for more.
MORE PLEASE.

[x_avecia_x]

Yeah Mr Edison, whilst the lesser of the two Edison parent evils, would definitely punch Jeff. And by all means go ahead and punch Ms. Edison - she's a proper bitch!

And yeah, the kiss is going to permeate through the rest of the fic, especially when you read the next chapter, I think it might be my favourite so far :)

Thanks again for reading, x

[rorge]

Well, you were right. I did like Jeff in this chapter.

It's good to see him stepping up to the plate, and doing all the stuff that he should be doing, even if he does have the odd complaint about it. I like that little streak of self-flagellation you've given him. That he puts himself in the firing line with Annie's dad not only because it's the right thing to do, but also because he kind of feels he deserves that punch.

Still not quite there, though, is he? If you kiss a girl, Jeff, never tell her you don't know why you did it. I'd guess that probably goes double if she's the mother of your unborn child.

I like Annie's independent streak, but man oh man, does she ever cut her nose off to spite her face. Insisting on staying in the Dildopolis apartment, just because she wants to be her own woman is admirable, but kinda shortsighted. Hopefully Jeff can convince her otherwise soon.

[x_avecia_x]

Oh thank goodness, I hate being wrong!

As for Jeff, yeah he's trying really hard to do 'the right thing' but Annie is still a bit uncomfortable with it because although Jeff usually comes through for her, it's usually with resistance. There is no resistance here, he actively wanted to be there when she told her parents.

But you're right, he needs to get his head sorted out before he goes kissing girls without a reason, especially girls expecting his unborn child!

I kind of think you might be in my head a bit in this fic because you're picking up on things that are meant to be quite subtle so either I'm really crap at subtlety (entirely possible) or you are an amazingly astute reader - Annie is indeed very shortsighted about the whole situation with her apartment. This is dealt with in the next chapter and I do hope you'll like where I went with it :)

Thanks again x

[crittab]

Annie's evil mother sounds about right. I really like the way you're playing Jeff in this whole thing, he's pretty well in-character given what we know about him.

Another great chapter. Looking forward to more :)

[x_avecia_x]

Well that made me relax a bit because I now have incredible hang ups about characters being a tad well...OOC!

Thanks again for reading x

[ndnickerson]

oh, jeff. part of me is kinda happy he got punched, but at least he's trying to do the right thing. and making out a little with annie? just a great bonus. ;) can't wait for the next chapter.

[x_avecia_x]

Yeah, I think by this point you're trying to sympathize with him - I mean Pierce already punched him when everyone found out so Annie's dad was just a bit extra torture for him. But you're right, he is trying to step up without over-stepping the mark. It's a fine line he's having to walk right now.

Next chapter coming tonight I hope! Thanks again for reading x

[drgirl11]

If I were some sort of narrator-god ala George of the Jungle I would point out that having as much gratuitous smutty sexy time as they can manage in the next 9 months can't get them in any more trouble. Therefore Jeff *clearly* needs to take his pants off. I'm just saying.

(more more more more)

[x_avecia_x]