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The Crane Wife: Chapter 6 of 8 (Part II)

Feb 02, 2010 10:47

Title: The Crane Wife
Chapter: Six (Part II): Eight-->this had to be cut in half and posted separately due to lj length limitations
Author: x_los
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Five/Ainley!Master
Summary: In which the Doctor apologizes.
Beta: aralias--I'm posting this under f-lock for the moment because she hasn't quite endured it in full just yet. I'll make it ( Read more... )

the crane wife, five/master, series, fanfiction

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marquisebaelish February 3 2010, 04:08:46 UTC

Have very few coherent thoughts right now. This absolutely eviscerated me. EVISCERATED.

Just... just... FIIIVE. And the Five-as-a-selkie imagery was so pretty.
I was a little surprised by the sudden darker turn at the end of the first section. It was like, OHSNAP SUDDEN UNEXPECTED DUBCON. But then Five just PWNS ALL and as much as they're *true*, I want to strangle him for saying those things to the Master. HARSH, DOCTOR. TOO HARSH.
Oh, but then he came back and *apologized* and it was ridiculously sweet and I may have wibbled a bit. Oh, and hello awesome porn. But then oh no SOMETHING IS UP because Five is being Poignant and DON'T TRUST HIM MASTER, HE'S GOING TO ESCAPE AND RUIN THE FLUUUUFF.
And-and-and then... DOCTOOOOOR. *cries* HOW COULD YOU?

And now I'm dead of angst.

But just an itty bitty thing:
“Turn around. On your hands and knees.”
the Doctor complied, and in a moment continued... Your capital letter ran away there. Might want to catch him. :D ( ... )

x_losfic February 3 2010, 23:14:30 UTC

As per above, if some selkie!five fanart happens, I WILL NOT BE SORRY.

I think this is Five's 'actually I'm a badass--so you know' chapter--see Five smack the Master down! See Five escape with incredible competence!

How could the capital letter betray me like that?! I THOUGHT IT WAS LOVE!!

Ah, yes, thanks, fixed that--now he takes it off when he gets the wristlets.

Hah, no, shouldn't do, I don't have to move continents between these chapters. :p

marquisebaelish February 4 2010, 00:53:08 UTC

See, if I could draw with seriousness I would totally make that happen. As is, you'd probably get a cracky doodle of Five as Botticelli's Venus.

And I completely loved Five's badass-ness, btw. He really is incredibly awesome, he just never gets to show it off. Poor Five. It's not your fault things die around you a lot in canon.

Am v. nervous awaiting the last chapter now. I hope the Master doesn't go too batshit. Or at least, if he does, that Five gets to pwn him some more. *bites nails*

x_losfic February 4 2010, 23:59:48 UTC

Aha. He'd just be trying to cover himself on the clam shell.

I know! He's just grossly unlucky. And takes it worse than other Doctors.

Muahahahaha. You will have to WAIT FOR IT.

asthenie_vd February 3 2010, 19:19:55 UTC

x_losfic February 3 2010, 23:42:27 UTC

God it is long, I'm sorry, this shit is, in total, 45,468 words now. WITHOUT Chapter seven. That's roughly 200 standard book pages O_O ( ... )

asthenie_vd February 4 2010, 17:38:09 UTC

x_losfic February 5 2010, 02:39:39 UTC

Eugh--or Three/Jo, that one makes me wibble.

Oh good good, I've been pretty worried re: having failed to write mutually sympathetic characterization in that bit even since someone told me they read it as black and white straight-up rape.

Hah. Thinking of this, have made a giant list of shit that remains unfinished/unedited--and there's a lot more than marriage!crack--but that's 26,008 at the moment, so it may well get finished soon, if only because there's not a /LOT/ left to write, possibly 20,000 more.

Poor guy--there's no hugging in this Palace. Just drama and SCIENCE!!

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roachpatrol February 3 2010, 22:32:55 UTC

Oh my god, this is so sad! And wonderful! I love this series, you've done a brilliant job. Thank you for writing it, and I look forward to your next update super much.

x_losfic February 3 2010, 23:05:51 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm delighted it was emotionally effective for you.

vforvegan February 4 2010, 07:57:28 UTC

Gleep. You've reeled me in with porn, and now you dispense plot (with, of course, lashings of porn).
I've been following this fic since it started, and you appear to be one of those writers whose brilliance makes me want to hide in a corner and never attempt to write again. Thankfully, that impulse has been transformed into 'I must write, just to contribute to anything RELATED to said brilliance'.
*sighs* Pornography really is the best way to prepare oneself for a Politics Exam, I DON'T THINK.

x_losfic February 4 2010, 23:55:27 UTC

'Lashings of porn' is very British Navy discipline. Your compliments are intimidatingly nice! And er, do well, despite my enabling your procrastination? :p

rallalon February 5 2010, 07:34:04 UTC

I tend to be a bit of a lurker, but sometimes, a story is just so good/batshit/brilliant that I can’t not say anything due to having thought about it too much. It’s a little all or nothing that way. So hello, I adore your writing, your characterizations, and all the layers in both, and now I’m going to ramble for a little bit ( ... )

rallalon February 5 2010, 07:34:22 UTC

Now, this is the bit that has me wondering the most about the Doctor. First off, that was badass as hell and just generally awesome. Unfortunately, second, his entire plan hinged on the assumption that the Master would run to protect him in a time of danger. That the Master will do this has to be a given and for it to be a given, the Doctor has to understand and, more importantly, acknowledge the Master’s motivations. He could potentially keep denying his own feelings after this, but I don’t think even the Doctor could go back to blinding himself as to what’s going on in the Master’s head and hearts ( ... )

x_losfic February 7 2010, 17:23:33 UTC

I think it's important that the bit about the plan hinging on the Master coming running was in the Master's pov. He feels like a rube, like he's been had--the Doctor knew the Master would come himself for a threat like the Likkaut, let alone a serious menace like the Daleks. The Master can't help but see the strategic decision as deeply personal and humiliating because the Doctor was the one making it, whereas I think the Doctor's still comfortable deluding himself about the extent to which the Master has a passing crush.

Thanks about it being badass! I wanted him to do something hard so I could assure myself I wasn't writing woobie!subby!Five.

Ah no, actually--I edited it at some point when I realized I'd not taken care of the collar, and now it goes when the cuffs do. Otherwise he'd just be too easy to track?

I think he currently believes the Master will cool down, given a little time... aha.

Again, thanks for commenting!

rallalon February 8 2010, 02:47:20 UTC

The Master can't help but see the strategic decision as deeply personal and humiliating because the Doctor was the one making it, whereas I think the Doctor's still comfortable deluding himself about the extent to which the Master has a passing crush.Just when I think he might be getting it, no? Seriously, though, I feel like something has to register on a deeper level than that, at this point. Maybe he can justify the attraction as a physical thing, maybe he can justify the mental compatibility from being genius Time Lords, maybe he can even justify the Master's sexual assault of a freak-out in the first part of this chapter as a possessive man's response to being spurned by one of his possessions, but there's still that proposal. For a man who plans like the Master to propose a longterm alliance of any sort means that it's longterm (with, of course, minor-to-severe threats of backstabbing that don't apply in this particular instance ( ... )

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