I wrote another poem, and this one is my absolute favorite!

[x_pandagrrl_x]

For english we had to write a poem in the style of "Casey at the Bat." So I wrote the following, only it went much deeper than just an english assignment for me...so here goes

Comments

AWESOME

[anonymous]

i love it! nicely done, little e!

[singingurl2511]

wow that was really good...your a very good poet..great job!!
luv ya!
~Jackie~

[schizorain]

I really like how you wrote this. The whole stalking type idea is very familiar to me. I like how you got so much down with this. Good job! *thumbs up*

-Melissa

[rubigshot]

Excellent perception of infatuation among teenagers. You have a definite rhyme pattern, though you don't adhere to a certain syllable structure. Nevertheless, it is wonderful demonstration of the subtle nuances of what teenagers call a "crush," and it's fleeting existence. Work on vocabulary a bit, and perhaps quicker turns of line. However, your idea is unique and admirable. Great job Erica.

[rubigshot]

*it is A wonderful demonstration.......sorry....I can't give writing advice if I don't take the time to make sure I don't sound stupid.

[lori9304]

hey, just compliment her.. you don't hafta point out structure mistakes. nice job erica

[rubigshot]

Oh I'm sorry...constructive criticism is not allowed. Truth is not allowed. Just compliment her. Compliment her, compliment her, silly boy! No helpful advice! How dare you, how dare you think your thoughts count! How dare you think yourself worthy to criticize! Stupid boy!

Who are you? Your reply made me sick, because it summarizes something so tremendously detrimental of human nature. Think about that statement again, please.

Erica

[anonymous]

Erica, I'm not usually the kind of person who gets into poetry. haha! but i read your poem and i heard you read it in class, and it moves me. It is seriously one of the best poems i've ever read. I'm not just saying this becuase your my friend, i really think it's beautiful. ok bye lylas Rach