Amy, these are beautiful. I don't say that to everyone; even Reno, I poke about his stories and correct his grammar and stuff. But...
Why did you want my opinion? These are better than anything I've ever written. The half rhymes, the rhythm that fits perfectly to the emotion, the metaphorical imagery...
Love, love, LOVE them. Especially the first three. ^^ I'm saving this to my memories.
As one poet to another, I value your opinion and any critique you may have. Plus I was shamelessly promoting them so people will read them because no one ever seems to read any of them. I'm glad you really like them though.
Yeah, my favorite is Colors, and Reno said he liked Crescendo. Those seem to be the good ones or something. xD I can't believe you're gonna save them. Now I'm going to blush *laughs*
*laughs* About time! That'd make all of us, right? ^^
The only thing I'd suggest is not using the same word to end consecutive lines - unless that's done for a specific reason, for a special effect. But otherwise; GET THEM OUT THERE! I will happily lend what...limited aid I can. :P But it's MY turn to kick YOU up the butt. You know your style is pretty close to Carol Ann Duffey's?
*grins* I only save the really, really awesome stuff. ^^
I've blushed before....maybe not in front of you....xD So yeah, that'd make all of us.
It's usually done for an effect, otherwise I wouldn't put it there, because I don't like doing that as much unless I have to xD Yay for the limited aid, I can use any aid \o/ I would take that as a compliment if I knew who she was >> So I'll still take it as a compliment.
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Amy, these are beautiful. I don't say that to everyone; even Reno, I poke about his stories and correct his grammar and stuff. But...
Why did you want my opinion? These are better than anything I've ever written. The half rhymes, the rhythm that fits perfectly to the emotion, the metaphorical imagery...
Love, love, LOVE them. Especially the first three. ^^ I'm saving this to my memories.
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As one poet to another, I value your opinion and any critique you may have. Plus I was shamelessly promoting them so people will read them because no one ever seems to read any of them. I'm glad you really like them though.
Yeah, my favorite is Colors, and Reno said he liked Crescendo. Those seem to be the good ones or something. xD I can't believe you're gonna save them. Now I'm going to blush *laughs*
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The only thing I'd suggest is not using the same word to end consecutive lines - unless that's done for a specific reason, for a special effect. But otherwise; GET THEM OUT THERE! I will happily lend what...limited aid I can. :P But it's MY turn to kick YOU up the butt. You know your style is pretty close to Carol Ann Duffey's?
*grins* I only save the really, really awesome stuff. ^^
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It's usually done for an effect, otherwise I wouldn't put it there, because I don't like doing that as much unless I have to xD Yay for the limited aid, I can use any aid \o/ I would take that as a compliment if I knew who she was >> So I'll still take it as a compliment.
Awwwww. *blush*
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i still say you should publish. you are that good my dear.
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