I love it because you took a character that already exists and managed to see through his eyes and write a beautiful piece. There weas only one line that didn't seem to fit, which was And although I could miss out on love and marriage and such. It just isn't in line with the rest of the beautiful poetic language. I like your narrative voice, it's very easy to follow while still being intriguing.
Thanks. That one line didn't sit right with me either. But I wanted to post it before I went out tonight. It was used because Peter misses what everyone else gets to experience, but he has a joy we don't know. It wasn't really just about Peter Pan, its about everyone who never wanted to grow up into conformity. I'm glad you like it.
it does make sense. and thank you so much for replying. i love getting feedback, either negative or positive(which all of you have been so generous with). so again, thanks.
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I love it because you took a character that already exists and managed to see through his eyes and write a beautiful piece. There weas only one line that didn't seem to fit, which was And although I could miss out on love and marriage and such. It just isn't in line with the rest of the beautiful poetic language. I like your narrative voice, it's very easy to follow while still being intriguing.
Continue doing what you do!
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That one line didn't sit right with me either. But I wanted to post it before I went out tonight. It was used because Peter misses what everyone else gets to experience, but he has a joy we don't know.
It wasn't really just about Peter Pan, its about everyone who never wanted to grow up into conformity. I'm glad you like it.
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