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Devil Ride 43/57

Jan 05, 2011 15:39

Title: Devil Ride ( Read more... )

Comments 10

psychomonkey_29 January 5 2011, 06:47:48 UTC

Thank you for another wonderful update! As always you bring the right amount of happiness, desire, giddiness and many more great emotions to the characters.

Please update as you are able!

xenalvr January 5 2011, 06:57:16 UTC

hey, I'm glad you liked it! I wasn't too sure about it actually... thought it was a little weak... hm.

laniecroft January 5 2011, 07:48:07 UTC

Nice idea with the coffee mugs and LOL Olivia being unable to read first thing in the morning :D They really start know each other.
I like how they start to do daily stuff together like picking up Emma.
You really have a way with words: "As Olivia fought to catch her breath, she realised that this was everything she never thought she had always wanted." awesome
Stuff like this makes your writing so enjoyable and great.
Them dancing ... mmh ... so romantic ...oh yeah!

xenalvr January 6 2011, 05:32:29 UTC

thanks, I really liked that line too :)

bsofthewest January 5 2011, 13:03:07 UTC

Weak? Are you fraking out of your mind?
First of all, everything is moved along perfectly, but with the hint of dread that lurks everywhere, until that asshole is put down. Even pulling up to the school, and Emma not being there for a second, seems worrisome.
The humor and personalities just get better...Olivia thinking of changing to a stick shift car...snort.
But the dancing!
My fav version of that song is Frank Sinatra's. To have him serenade our ladies in a dance of love is just too perfect, along with your sensual last lines. You are a wonderful writer.

xenalvr January 6 2011, 05:32:09 UTC

thank you, I love that song! It's romantic and classy but not cheesy... kinda perfect for this update!

hoping2 January 5 2011, 17:39:44 UTC

First thought.......WOW! Second thought.......Are you kidding me?!?!?! That was definitly not weak! You have such a way with words.....it was a very nice mix of them teasing each other, time with Emma, and then the dancing!!!! Love, love, loved the dancing!!! It was sweet and tender and......just awesomness:)

I've been reading and commenting not sure why they haven't been posting.......hm.

xenalvr January 6 2011, 05:31:37 UTC

who hasn't been posting?

Thanks for the positive feedback! :)

hoping2 January 6 2011, 05:40:54 UTC

What I meant was not sure why my comments to your past chapters haven't posted. :)

xenalvr January 6 2011, 07:31:16 UTC

oh, I'm afraid that just means they won't be posted. ha~