You know what I love best? Your Ed isn't this weak, effeminate thing that so many fanfics make him into. Yours is a perfect characterization, even as broken and battered as he is, he's still Ed, as defiant and ballsy as ever, but pushed to the point where suicide is the only option he sees open to him. You bring him to it very credibly, though I am very glad he didn't manage it.
Yes, Ed is damaged, irreparably in some aspects, but he's still the same guy. Little pieces of his personality will bleed through eventually, but that won't happen until he starts to heal, and that will take time. I don't plan to make this an overly-cheesy, cliched hurt/comfort fic. Things will get worse before they get better, and you'll be seeing more of the hell Ed's been put through as the story progresses. I'm sure it will be right up your alley!
This Abram guy is already suspicious. Mustang's fury was palpable, and before I had wondered why he sent Hawkeye off and not Havoc, but now I see why: Roy didn't want anywhere there to stop him. Poor Ed has suffered so much (and for what?!?!?! I so hope we find out) and was too far gone to realize he had been saved. Ed will never be the same again, though.
Also, I loved this line: If Havoc had been a braver man - or Hawkeye - he might have tried to talk some reason into the Colonel.
I tried to keep everyone in character as much as possible, but the situation they've been put into would strain anyone to their limits. I imagine Roy would feel protective of anyone on his team, but Ed most of all. I've always imagined them to have more of a filial relationship than a paternal one; Roy views Ed as an annoying younger brother that he can tease and boss around, but in the end, there's that protective streak that makes him snap (ha! pun!) when anyone threatens his 'little bro;. We'll be seeing more of that in later parts of the story.
Fucking hell. I am going to be one seriously pissed off fangirl if, as I suspect, this Abrams bastard is the one behind all this. Oh yes. I will be howling for his blood if he makes it so that Ed's torturer gets off. *seethes*
I really felt uneasy reading through this chapter if I was mustang i would want to rip off abrahm and the snickering guy's face too! And Ed going up to the point where he tried to kill himself ;_;
I read one of your reply I just hope that it doesn't go too angsty it's just bad enough as it is ;_;
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Yes, Ed is damaged, irreparably in some aspects, but he's still the same guy. Little pieces of his personality will bleed through eventually, but that won't happen until he starts to heal, and that will take time. I don't plan to make this an overly-cheesy, cliched hurt/comfort fic. Things will get worse before they get better, and you'll be seeing more of the hell Ed's been put through as the story progresses. I'm sure it will be right up your alley!
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Also, I loved this line: If Havoc had been a braver man - or Hawkeye - he might have tried to talk some reason into the Colonel.
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I tried to keep everyone in character as much as possible, but the situation they've been put into would strain anyone to their limits. I imagine Roy would feel protective of anyone on his team, but Ed most of all. I've always imagined them to have more of a filial relationship than a paternal one; Roy views Ed as an annoying younger brother that he can tease and boss around, but in the end, there's that protective streak that makes him snap (ha! pun!) when anyone threatens his 'little bro;. We'll be seeing more of that in later parts of the story.
Glad you liked!
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<.<
Not telling!
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I read one of your reply I just hope that it doesn't go too angsty it's just bad enough as it is ;_;
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