stop!

[xgoodytwoshoesx]

okay. here is my 'sonnet' that i wrote.
she said we didnt have to watch meter or
count syllables and that we could slant
rhyme but we workshopped my poem in
class (lucky me) and she said that while
it was very vivid (?) the ending was weak
and the rhymes are too slanty for my
poem to count as a sonnet.

any comments for me??

His brick red

Comments

[xdanielemurderx]

not bad jillian.

[xgoodytwoshoesx]

yeah my main crit in class was that the last two lines are kind of a let down. which is pretty true. kind of a cliche rhyme, but whatever. i wrote you a letter today. are you really going to puerto rico..? and if you are, when are you leaving, because i think im going to seattle in the last week of june. we should hang out.. xoxo

[xgoodytwoshoesx]

um yeah. so i guess that was kind of a dumb comment since you just posted about your trip and what not. now the main question is: will you be in seattle the last week of june?