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[xhalfthebattlex]

Tonight we fly... Rain, thunder, lightning, the severity of an incident is the furthest thing from our minds. We set the sky as our limits, yet were closing in on the heavens. The clouds are nice, but they leave me with a faint desciption of your eyes; weakening the purpose of this flight. How about we sleep on the moon tonight? It will give us a

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[heres_toyou]

c'est bon
et....

c'est l'halloween.

[rachelrogers37]

i think it's very good. but im sure you'll hear that from everyone so i took the time to seriously consider what i would change. this is what i came up with.

a.maybe you could use a more effective word than "nice" for the clouds , because the rest of it has large impactful terms.

b.i think that the end is very good , "I'm missing out on because the sparkles in your eyes catch my attention and blurr my vision, but im loving every second of it..."

i would just take out the "catching my attention and" and just make it "I'm missing out on because, the sparkles in your eyes blurr my vision , but im loving every second of it" becuase obviously if the sparkles blurr your vision, they've got your attention.

c.then finish it .

but thats just what i think. i mean its written by scott , not rachel. but its well written and i like it. take it easy sCott.

[____kaitlynn]

magnificent.

mmm, & I haven' talked to you in the longest time. so I suggested we start. =)

<3

[staceadoodle]

You're such a poet Scott. If only I could write as good as you.

[aly55a]

you've been waiting a while for my comment. yeah i know. but anyway, i love it. it sounds marvelous. now it's time to finish this one...

From a blank sheet of paper to a colorful masterpiece...I'll paint a potrait of you and name it "Beautiful." I'll hang it somewhere that everyone can see it. Your bright green eyes will catch everyone's attention, just as they caught mine. Your hair is so immaculate, every strand in it's place.

keep going fag ass.
love.love.love.

[unknown03]

i will be in MI from the 20th to the 28th.
u better effin call me :)

[newfoundcrazi11]

your writing and laurens writing are very much the same
i suggest that you two get together and figure something out
i think u two could go far

<3
loveyou