Fall Out Boy - Another Perfect Day - Chapter One

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Title: Another Perfect Day
Author: xlikexaxloserx - Hello. -
Pairing: Patrick x Pete
Rating: R - for language and actions. Maybe? -
Disclaimer: I really own nothing but the concept which seems very cliché and obvious to most of the people out there.
Summary: Patrick just got enrolled to the St. Julius All-Boy Boarding School and somehow, he seems to be one

Comments

[night_raining]

snarry sounds cute compared to snaco. dont hate me. hello xlikexaxloserx. but sirry sounds the cutest, although hadra, i dont know what they call them is the cutest & best. sephi, i read ur story and commented already earlier (MSN), but hello again. fanfiction.net is crazy right now. so sad. so long only can comment.
very long fanfic. people love. bad boy plus 'nerd and bullied'. people love. hello.

[xlikexaxloserx]

you're an idiot but thank you for beta-ing and being the first one to actually read my first attempt. thanks and you're an idiot.

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[averagejane42]

Very cool. I especially like the idea of a boys boarding school.

[xlikexaxloserx]

hey thank you. really? i always thought the idea of an all-boys boarding school was typical and obvious.

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Nice icon!

[averagejane42]

Yeah, it's good. Not only does it allow for many interesting situations to occur, but I also attend a womens' school. I can totally relate.

[1800number]

Hm, I really liked that. There were a few spelling 'mistakes' here and there, but it was more like, you used proper words but there were words that were 'more correct' for the phrase. (Cheers to that confusing sentence.) I loved the way it was worded, especially, the way you explained the statues of "some Roman guy", like it was really sort of inside Patrick's head (because who seriously knows the names of every Roman god? There's a thick line between genius and nerd...well that was rude of me.)

It was pretty long and I was wary of reading it at first but it was really, really good. I don't actually suggest a beta if you don't have one now because there weren't a lot of mistakes (like two that I'd actually consider 'mistakes'), but if you ever need or want one I'd probably be up for it because I really, really like this. (Plus, boarding schools somehow equal like hot slashy boysex in my mind...don't bother asking, I don't know why...)

♥ keep it upppp. :]

[xlikexaxloserx]

whoa! this is long, baby! Mistakes? Where, where? Show me? Tell me? I have a feeling that it's "realisation" which most people write as "realization"? Is that it? I don't know? Must've missed a few more.

I really appreciate your offer of helping me to beta and all but I've already asked my best friend to do so (and damn, that girl reads like a race car) but if she starts to suck in beta-ing, you'll be the first person I'll come running to, okay? It's deal and promise and if I lied, I'll go straight to Hell. (Howdy, Satan!)

Hmmm, boysex... *ponders for a minute* ...I can't really write smut... maybe just some hints - aw, don't make me spoil it!

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Cute little red ambulance going "Eee-ohh" "Eee-ohh" "Ee-ohh" - that's the noise of the ambulance I think...

[1800number]

Well I noticed "crept" instead of "creeped" but they could mean the same thing because it's just a different way of using the past tense, and "stoops" rather than "steps" but those could be used in the same sense. I noticed "pf" rather than "of" but it was right after the word "tip" (I think) so that'd be a REALLY easy mistake. And "walling" instead of "walking". I think. It could've been my reading though.

Haha, well I've never beta-ed(what the hell is the past tense of that anyway?) anything before so it's probably a good idea to stick with her. I just really like this. (Oh, and hi! My friend's friend calls me Satan. Because apparently Sadie sounds like Satan?)

Ah, you don't even need to write smut. All boys boarding school immediately equals sex for me. I don't know why...

yay for ambulances! :]]

[trishaisme]

Long is my friend ^.^

I like it...But it seems like Patrick has a better chance with hooking up with Andy. I like but don't at the same time, cause I am always reading stories where it's how much they love each other in the first chapter. So, yeah.

I can reccomend betas, which are used to correct sentences. IM me sometime. But this was good, I didn't see that many mistakes. Though I wanted to read the story more >.> Nice job though.

[xlikexaxloserx]

Andy's just friendly and Patrick is, well, follow anything. Aw, I don't write rushy fictions like that. I like to slow things down, get the boys' feelings all the together and then see what it comes off to. I hope you don't mind that.

Thank you, I could've swore I saw several spelling mistakes and errors the other day - well, last night - Thank you for reading I hoped you help you to pass the time.

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Our icons are like: Blue Patrick VS Red Patrick! Fight!

[trnoffthelights]

That was really good. Loved the way it was written and all the details. I miss reading these long fics, yay! for you.

Ignore me lol

<3

[xlikexaxloserx]

Thank you, mate. I put too much details which can easily bore anyone off. So thanks.

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I'm not ignoring you. You're too nice.