Comments | xiasangli: Spock and Number One discuss Nyota and Ki'sekiko

xiasangli

Spock and Number One discuss Nyota and Ki'sekiko

Jan 03, 2010 00:47

I'm sure all amateur writers have failed plot lines. This plot never had a chance, yet it managed to get typed up. I just don't know the hell why. Maybe this is what happens when you work 12-16 hours for four days straight and then imagine you can write some damned fan fiction on your off-day.

In this FailedPlot, Ki'sekiko did some magic tricks ( Read more... )

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teaoli January 2 2010, 16:42:25 UTC

LOL! We've all done this.

I even did it on purpose in Once and Future and in Entanglement just so I could have a character deconstruct the concept, and as a reminder to myself and my readers of why this stuff doesn't work; not everyone got joke, unfortunately. I think it garnered exactly two laughs -- both from the same writer/reader.

xiasangli January 3 2010, 09:30:45 UTC

Thanks for suffering through it.

I don't even have the presence of mind to do something like this on purpose. It just happens fairly regularly and it drives me crazy. Ultimately, I need to clear the mess from my head. Perhaps I need to write it in order to rid myself of it. I wish there was a simpler way.

think it garnered exactly two laughs -- both from the same writer/reader.

You did well then!

love_in_spanish January 2 2010, 18:21:27 UTC

I'm not sure I really understand what's going on here as it relates to the masterpiece that is Upheaval. I get the gist of it, but my tired brain can't see what purpose it would have served in the larger story. I can see why you didn't include it. Thank you for sharing ( ... )

xiasangli January 3 2010, 10:15:41 UTC

can't see what purpose it would have served in the larger story.The larger story was extremely different in purpose and tone in the earlier version. I suspect this is why I'm such a slow writer. I simply can't settle on the reason I'm writing fan fiction easily. I entered this only wishing to prove that Nyota can be awesome as a xenolinguist. There was more to her than hailing frequencies, speaking languages and conjugating verbs. While it's great to see her as Captain or First Officer or Spy, I think she's awesome as Operations, as an Engineer ( ... )

new_hillbilly January 2 2010, 19:23:01 UTC

Oh, man... this is so interesting!!! I would love to see this expanded, even if you think it is out in left field. Funny that Teaoli responded first... this kind of reminds me of her writing, which is so intricate and amazing. (Teaoli, if your writing is a joke, my feeble brain can't comprehend it.. I just love.)

xiasangli January 3 2010, 09:49:58 UTC

Teaoli is a gem!

I'm glad you've found it interesting. Thank you. Perhaps if this had been another story in another setting, I wouldn't have had qualms about using it.

In the Upheaval universe though, I believe the use of such a plot device would diminish Nyota's awesomeness. Using it would cheapen her gifts and it would cheapen the overall series. Instead, I feel obligated as the writer/creator to make Nyota's relationship with Ki'sekiko, as well as Spock's, more meaningful. I need Nyota to earn the reputation that has been bestowed upon her. A dear friend of mine expended a great deal of time and effort to help me get Nyota across...

Could telepathy play a part? You bet. I'd be a fool to ignore Spock's gifts. Could Romulan ultimately be Nyota's mother tongue? Oh yes! That would be a story, wouldn't it?

Opps... have I been babbling? Sorry. :(

Thank you for suffering through this!

clar1208 January 3 2010, 03:38:35 UTC

I have a file full of stuff like this. No one will ever see it. You are truely brave for posting yours.

xiasangli January 3 2010, 09:51:49 UTC

I'm sure I'm not brave! :D Believe me, there are things I wouldn't ever show to a living soul.

spocksgal January 3 2010, 15:17:32 UTC

Would be a good concept for another story but I can see why its not in Upheaval. Any plans to use the idea elsewhere?

xiasangli January 4 2010, 03:24:07 UTC

One of the reasons I shouldn't write is because I don't plan. No outlines. No brainstorming. No sketches. Just madness :D

Even when I trash scenes, I generally do not trash ideas. I'm sure this will come up somewhere. I am planning on writing a different Uhura/Spock set during and after the movie. In it, I will work on the assumption that they've perhaps made out, but never had a full relationship (i.e. no dating or sex). I normally follow genre characters on two journeys.