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[xibanezx]

Here's a poem I just wrote. I'm thinking of submitting it to a contest where I can win a significant scholarship, so any contructive criticism is not only welcome, but encouraged. It's written as an ode to Robert Frost, and contains a few allusions to his works. It's still in stage two or three, where I look at individual word choices and find

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[jof00l]

O RLY?

[xibanezx]

rly

[xibanezx]

This part need work:
"...And once you asked the night
To be too dark."
I was referencing a poem he wrote that ends with "Let the night be so dark that I cannot see into the future. Let what will be, be."
I think that shows through, but the way I wrote it just sounds choppy.
Any suggestions?

[xibanezx]

O RLY?

[glitter_facex]

'Its not through weeds alone your spirit wends.'
I love everything about your poem, i think it will win, except for the last word in that line, i dont know why...hmm

[xibanezx]

wend means "to weave through"
its not a common word but i like it because it has the "w" i was looking for
im willing to change it though, and ideas?

[glitter_facex]

I will get back to you.